All Comments on 'Knocking at Your Door'

Since all the contributions feature selections from the same menu - cunnilingus, vaginal penetration, oral stimulation, anal penetration - it is the additional information that sets one story apart from another. A good introduction leading to the meeting of the two parties and a tasteful and gentle pathway to the overt sexual activity is probably of more interest to the reader than your "right into it" approach - "courtship" as opposed to "wham, bam, thank you ma'am". Try taking the kernel of your story and dressing it up at the beginning and end and submitting again under a new name and see what the reactions are.