All Comments on 'Lascivious Lisa'

Thank you for your very hot story!

Natural build-up, explosive sex; what's not to like?

Hope you plan some sequels. Should be an interesting week.

since there was never anything between them before and she never even hinted she was interested in him why would he even want to do anything with her even when she offered he would turn her down and tell her either she stopped teasing or they would go home keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic and believable

Two hot kids--one male, one female, and they want to fuck. What's unrealistic about that? A previous commenter thought it was unrealistic. OK, so they are brother and sister, maybe its not 100 percent realistic, but close. I enjoyed it, realistic or not.

That was a nice start to what could be a really good series. I know their back story wasn't completely vetted out in this chapter (of which I hope there are more), but those could easily be explored in future chapters without serious harm to the plot. I would definitely stay tuned and follow this pair of characters down any road you choose to steer them. Thank you for writing this, romanticwench, and for all your other stories.

Now, to the brave Anonymous reviewer who left the immensely helpful "unrealistic" comment - this is, on the whole, a fiction/fantasy submission website. Do you really expect fiction to be dead on realistic? How about the stories that involve vampires, aliens or intelligent internet trolls, are they realistic, too? I bet you think Santa Claus is real or that if you put a tooth under your pillow the Tooth Fairy will leave you a handful of quarters, right? Seriously, dude, it's FICTION/FANTASY.

....but I love your line about the "successful sleep ruse thing'. Great "tude" in this story.

except when I took breaks to take pics with some strawberries :o... story did go a bit quick but was filled with passion, nice change from lots of agonizing about incest...

Nice job! Hope you'll add more chapters. Lots of potential for more adventures as the siblings continue their road trip and visit some schools, hotels, clubs, malls, etc. along the way.......hope Lisa has the chance to try on some of her sexy outfits (Mini dresses, high heels, lingerie, swimsuits, etc.) she packed as they check out the colleges and their relationship grows.

You must write more. MUST.

I can't wait to see what the rest of this trip will reveal.

Dreamer

Add me to the list...I want to read more of this one.

Fun read! I would like a little background on these two. This story has my interest.

So could I please have some more?

Thanks for writing!

Been a while, but glad to have you back writing. I'm even prepared to overlook several mistakes, such as missing words, spelling, and this one near the start:-

"...we started our journey by noon almost on the dot." The words "by noon" mean before noon, so it's not possible to start before noon, "almost on the dot". But, like I said, it's good to have you back, so I'll it slide this one time.

A question for the moronic commenter before me...or am I missing the irony?

Loved it such a very hot sexy story and loved how it ended.

Anonymous, it's pretty obvious that he meant "I'll let it slide this one time."

no way would he put up with her you gave no background that would infer that they were close or had any interest in each other so no way would he think of doing any thing with her i agree with another commenter that he would have told her to stop and behave or they were going home

and as to bullit's comment they have seperate areas for fantacy therefore stories not in that area have to be based on reality and atleast somewhat realistic and believable otherwise there is no need for seperate catagories not that the idiot writers on this site have the brains to know what a catagory is

Can't wait to read more. Welcome back.

This story is really great compared to some of the worthless trash I read on this website

cold not hot just to damn unrealistic. you give no back ground to indicate they had any feelings for each other and as bitchy as she is there is no way he would want her. what you wrote here should be spread out over months not one day and this should be chapter two of a series. just another total turnoff only an underage virgin would find it hot.

"We started our journey by noon, almost on the dot." OK professor, let's examine your complaint that this is impossible. It appears that you are incapable of understanding the implied. Would it satisfy you if the author made the meaning more clear to the dullards in the audience if he/she had written, "We started our journey by noon (almost on the dot)"? Or would you prefer, "We started our journey at exactly 11:58 AM, almost on the dot of Noon"? Don't critique something negatively if you don't know what you're talking about.

Jeesh, kids these days. lol

As a twin to a sister, I believe that somehow this had a side of truth. My turn commenced when my twin sister and I were 11 and ending at 17 years of age.

fuck, that was hot.

Although they hadn't copulated together before, this is the beginning of an ongoing sex trip. The story line is an excellent introduction to their sexcapades and the promise of a solid week fucking together is exciting.

Please prepare more stories of this quality for us.

You write so well from a male's POV. This was such a good one! Could you write more brother/sister stories? Don't know why it's such a kink of mine. Especially, considering I'm an only child.

I knew she had ulterior motives!

I loved it! I stayed hard all the way through it!