All Comments on 'Last of the Unicorns'

...what a beautiful story. It's a pity they were not meant to be togather.

So are we going to have the son's story to continue this lovely poignant tale?

All I can say is, Wow!

loved the story, was a great read, keep up the good work

you made me cry!

A beautiful story, but I'm sorry there was no happy end.

But then, life is like that, isn't it?

I would have given it 100%, but for the errors in spelling and choice of words.

Do keep writing though.

Black Tulip

What can I say? An interesting piece of fiction. Not the most exciting erotic material I've ever seen, but a healthy mix of plot and romance. I've always been a sucker for the bittersweet endings, but building the romance up a bit more prior to it probably wouldn't have hurt.

Excellent read. Excellent content. Excellent story line, and just the right mix of intrigue and eroticism. Loved it! Keep up the great work. : )

First off I'm not awake so forgive me if I make -no- sense :D

I enjoyed writing this story but I also try to keep my stories "short" so I didn't build a great deal on the romance between Gavin and Alorna. In the end Alorna was doing what she had to in order to keep her species alive and Gavin is a man who doesn't get committed easily since his life has been rather rough. Ideally someday I might expand this into a true short novel and for that I've got more ideas and additions. Of course all of my stories suffer re-writes eventually, it behooves me to leave anything alone :P~~

I'm aware that my grammer and spelling often suck big time was well. Unfortunately spell check only catches so much! I'd be open to having new stories screened by an editor so if any of you feel like it please drop me a line :)

Thanks a bunch! I'm off to the hell hole that is work :D

Great story, please continue writing. Hopefully a sequel? :)

This was a very good story. I hope that one day you decide to continue it so we can see what happened to Alorna and Gavin

That was just beautiful. I do love it when the Gavin lone wolf types get tamed. A bittersweet ending, though, I hold out for the vain hope that they will be reunited someday.

I dont know why but this really reminded me of the movie the last unicorn, though it obviously is very diffrent.

Thanks for that trip down memory lane though

Yep you made me cry too. As a thought thought it would be interesting if you looked at the foal/boy's love life kind of how many maids can he get pregant to insure the survival of his race and maybe even have him return to to his father to learn how to best repolutate the unicorn holds. Just a thought...

Your story was artfully written,beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes.

Could've done without the bondage bit, but otherwise a wonderful story.

VERY well done, mate. A few minor grammatical errors here and there, but they didn't take from the beauty in which this story was written. The ending was bitter sweet, I guess I could live with it... But it would be awesome if you made a sequal. Like, finding a way to make humans into unicorns. I mean, how in the world is that little stallion gonna procreate if there are no more females of his species? WRITE A SEQUAL!!!!!!! XD

I began reading this and didn't think that it would be all that great. Well you blew that out of the water!! This was amazing! A few grammar issues but nothing that would distract from the story. I love how the ending was but I find myself wishing there was a part 2 of the story so I can see how it all truly ends. Over all I love this story

that was unbelevable! i loved it!

and very heartfelt story. i was surprised by how much it moved me. please keep up the good work. i look forward to reading more of your stories.

Truly this has to be one of the most magnificent stories I've read in a long time. You weave such a rich tapestry with your words, you feel for the characters and share their emotions. This was a genuine pleasure to read....and I will be reading it again soon.

Your writing is incredibly deep, without the convolution some fan-fiction writers get in their work, it seems effortless and flows so well. Truly great, and as others above have mentioned, SEQUEL!!

I noticed that several times when "sight" would have been appropriate, "site" was written, and at least once where "site" would have been the correct word, "sight" was used. I do believe it was every time for both cases, but I'm not sure.

And while "ever" is a valid English word, in all or most cases where it was used in this story, "every" would have been the correct word.

That being said, I enjoyed the story a lot, otherwise I wouldn't have bothered with this tip.

PS: I am a bit concerned though. Will Alorna seal herself yet again, have another foal with Gavin without getting sealed or will she further perpetuate her species by mating with her son? I hope for the first or second option. Sure, eventually there would need to be some kind of incest for the species to not die out, but within the same generation seems okay, while across generations appears very wrong to me.