All Comments on 'Latent Tendencies Ch. 01'

to a story I want to read more of. Please write the next chapter, so far an excellent start.

than those starting from first paragraph, all you see is just penises and vaginas rubbing each other from all kinds of angles, with the stories/words as mere props for sex acts,,,

in this kind of story, on the other hand, the sex acts, when they culminate, are just mere props or background for a story that takes the readers on a private journey of individual characters,,,

good prelude

There don't seem to be many surprises in store, but there's some slow, simmering sensuality here. Keep up the good work!

Paul graduates from college at an unknown age. Usually a graduate is 21 or 22 years old. Then he works for three years at which time his parents die. A year after that his sister loses her husband. So Paul is probably 25 or 26 at this point.

But his sister is 5 years younger and is already teaching 3rd grade. I had a somewhat difficult time accepting all of this without any help from the author suggesting a more workable timeline.

Also, I had a real hard time accepting that any widow would be relegated to the fourth row at her own husbands funeral.

Despite this, I liked the story and the way the author is drawing them together. I'm looking forward to Part two.

I want more. Please, please give me more.

At first the story jumped around alittle bit, got me alittle confused, but reading it again, I started to put it together. I really enjoyed this. Very nicely done. I see that the next part of the story is out, so I will start to read this one as well.

Baribrother

i loved it just wanted to correct something.. nerds wear pocket protecters not geeks ;) a geek is into video games. and a nerd is into books =] xD

Looks good, has potential! Now let me pick on it! Muhaha ;)

Love you too, Jen. Now, just relax for a bit." I help her in the tub, then shut the door behind me, and take a deep breath, attributing my feelings and constant hard-on to a serious lack of sex.

@@ what? Not because you just felt up your sister and stripped her naked? Huh!@@

Only rational idea I can come up with is, she is dreaming of Ronnie. My little sister would never think of me in such a way, and we never talked about sex, ever, but I don't think Jen was too adventurous. I lean over and kiss her cheek. "Honey, you just soak a bit more. I'll get your breakfast started."

@@ why do authors love to write the brothers in as fucking retards and prudes in these stories? Certainly isnt like that in the real world! Dreaming of Ronnie? Uh, she just asked her BROTHER to jill her off! She could have done herself if she wanted a fantasy dream. @@

They were my sister's panties, but I was thinking of my ex, Tracy. But, what the hell was Jen thinking of, she certainly didn't confuse me with Ronnie afterward. Had to be heat of the moment.l

@@ no you werent thinking of your wife, you lying shit, youve got a woodie for your sister and youre sniffing sisters panties thinking about fucking her while lying to yourself about it! Pussy!@@

Soon as the words are out of my mouth I know it sounded dumb, even moronic, it wasn't even correct grammar. I hand her the towel, mumbling something.

@@ lol, yep brother definately being penned as a pussy retard! Well maybe he'll improve! And the grammar wasn't bad compared to how bad its been so far in the story, lol.@@

I wipe the tears from her eyes, and kiss her gently on the lips. Quick, and nothing sexual, I keep telling myself, I never thought of her like that. She kisses me back, on the lips, longer and hugging me tight.

@@ bullshit! EVERY brother has thought about fucking his sister at some point in his life, unless she's really horrid looking, and truth be told even then you can bet at some point they still thought about it, even if they didnt want to admit it!@@