by johnnydrama
You totally fucking ruined the story. Totally destroyed any hopefully good story with Elise. What kind of shitbag would shove his dick in a girl, especially a tiny one, without spending time with fingers or small toys to stretch her out? Baby oil or not this would have tore the fuck out of a girl, and rape is rape. Should have stopped immediately when she was hurting, and should have back-handed the fuck out of the bitch that said to 'shut her the fuck up'.
You can write it in the story all you want that she 'forgave' you later, but nobody that gets raped by someone they trust is going to forgive him, much less the two bitches that stood by and encouraged it to happen.
Fuck. Perfectly good story ruined! :(
...just gives you the urge to cut off his balls while your shoving a baseball bat up his ass :/
Your hero may have a big cock, but here he is just a big prick!
Nothing erotic here, Dude. Savagely raping a young girl's virgin ass might turn on a few sadists (who should move over to BDSM) but it was a BIG let down from the two hot stories before it. Get back on track, and try to control your ass fetish.
Caroline in Jersey
...no such thing as "you shouldn't give a blow job to a guy right after he's fucked a cheerleader's ass" in a story!