by Cromagnonman
glad he found a career that interested him and found love too...love how his grand father took up with her mother...his mother should have taken up with Gino....then kept it all in the family...
rightbank, when you are dealing with people that english is not their first language it will be stilted.As for the two commenters talking about Maria's mother seducing Macolm go back and read it a little slower.She was instructing him not seducing,although this not how I would have gone about it.
I just wish the language wasn't so stilted. It seems mechanical, almost robot like.
Law is boring and staid. Cooking is caring. Story is eccellentissimo!
Not interesting. Ho hum story. After the first page or so, I didn't care about the characters. Got boring and predictable. Did you insert the mom ,Giovanna, seduction to spice up the story?? It really didn't fit and broke with her personality.
Thank you for trying, better luck next time.
AMerryMan
It has been awhile since I read a nice Romance story. I love stories like this.
He loves the daughter and the mother, knowing this, seduces him?
Yuck!
A nice story. Good reading as well as writing. Used to have a friend near Cranbourne. We shot the breeze for 20 years via Morse code. He's passed on now. Until I looked at your biography, I was a bit puzzled by some of the phraseology. Good show, mate! Cheers!
The doctors and lawyers have all learned to follow protocol. I wonder how the Indian chiefs are doing? CM has done another fine job here.
Another good story and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.