by qhml1
What an interesting character to build a story around. I liked the premise very much. I also would like to know if the young women saved her marriage or not. Well done
and come up with very original story lines
Thank You
"Not at all. But I know you, quite well. You're me, in a past life." sorry that line cracked me up lol man i needed that laugh ty
This writing event of Randi's is like a really good smorgasbord - you want to try EVERYTHING. Thanks Q, always love your tales.
somewhere east of Omaha
another sketch trying to be a story.. actually two partial outlines that do not really seem to interconnect. Pass this one on people there is nothing here. Sorry 3 stars to express the disappointment in this latest offering from a really talented writer.
Wow, what a morning! So many of my favorite authors lined up after clicking on loving wives. My only disappointment was that this wasn't one of your longer stories. Sorry, this one was just 5* only because I wanted more! But I love the way the Angel of Doom approached her suggesting the end of her marriage yet left that unresolved in the end. Clearly the woman had failed the 'spouse test' but did she still have a pathway to recreate a loving marriage?
So good. Especially for a flash type tale. About the only thing not clear was how the Angel of Doom was informed about what and who the cheating woman was doing.
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4 very strong ****
As much as Q is my favorite LW author, I'm embarrassed, but feel compelled to ask. Is he taking a page from SaddleTramp1956's book? It feels like the beginnings of one of his story.
Still 5-stars though.
-JMFC
Loved it. You hit a good one. Thanks for the lift. I need to be made to think every once in a while.5 stars,the Bear approves. Have a good Holiday. Merry Christmas.
The BEAR
Excellent, excellent story told very well! It's 5***** all the way. What a wonderful break from the usual story that gets told and retold all the time here!
Good story and yes a warning. It would interesting to read about if the woman waiting for loverboy actually makes it home and somehow convinces hubby a blowjob isn't cheating. Thank you
Wow. This is so damned close to perfection, that it could qualify for the world's longest haiku. So much packed into 1.3K words! One of the Top-100 Ever on this site. Should go the head of the line if this is a contest entry!!! 5++++++/5!!!
Very interesting story and a different perspective. A unique story that uses different point of views that you don't find in most other stories. Good short read but also powerful.
Great story, Q, as usual. Well done. Thanks for posting. 5 stars, also as usual.
Simply outstanding Q! Loved the layers and emotions with so few words. Thank you!
Killian
My goodness I think this is your shortest story I've read. I am curious about how the other woman made out and how the "angel" knew so much about the guy she was seeing.
A great, complete story in just a few words. Qhml1 has nailed another one, completely.
1st hope its on time and beneficial, 2nd not at the risk of yours. TK U MLJ LV NV
I must be having an attack of the stupids tonight because I am sorry to say that I don't get it. I don't understand who super-mom is or how she knows what she knows. I don't dislike it, but I just don't understand it. Maybe I am missing something obvious.
Damn that was a good story. Sometimes its truly impossible to find the right words to describe something...and I cant begin to tell you what a great one this is.
Didn't work for me, my bad. Was it supposed to be made clear in the story why the Savior woman had all those details about the almost a slut woman? Sorry I couldn't follow it, but I appreciate the effort.
The gift of writing, in fact, is for very few.
How a writer manages to express his idea, so clearly and evidently, is even rarer.
And to do this, in so little space... I don't know how to qualify, who does this.
Qhml1 manages to do this. The depth of this text is incredible... the feelings of the characters, in such short lines.
The "Angel of Doom" sought redemption from her disastrous past, trying to save women just like her, before their worlds crumbled, just like hers. Maybe just to seek your own redemption... who will know.
I see no need to know if the cheating woman's husband took her back - which I find difficult, or threw her onto the curb. This epilogue the author left for each of the perverted minds of his readers.
Four stars, more than wue writing effort, concise and well-crafted work.
I like your longer texts better. Allows us a series of emotions throughout the pages. Going from anxiety to the expected end, passing through the anger of some developments, reaching the end, where everything "resolve" the way the author thought... and this brings me satisfaction.
But that's just my opinion.
I like that we never get resolution to the cheating wife. The struggle goes on eternally.
This one could have been expanded to anywhere between 6 and 60 pages. Sooooo many possibilities. Still a 5 though
Short, not so sweet, but plenty for the reader to fill in on their own.
Nice concise story. Many of the 3-5 chapter stories plod through the diatribe to blah blah blah.
One of the better short stories.
This is a very hard category in which to excel and this is well done.
Bill S.
It's Always So Obvious
Reading the comments after a flash story like this how many readers have the imagination of a gnat. Use your brain, fill it in your self instead of sitting in your high chair with your mouth open waiting to be fed more mush. I expect if I read all of the comments there'd be some about sluts and once a cheater always a cheater and all of the rest of the cliches, shit. *****'s. Signed: BTW
Q, I can't speak for everyone but for me your stories bring this host of mixed emotions. There is the fact that no one is better with words. You have this unique way of captivating your audience, leaving them wanting more - whether a 750 word story or 8 pages. Then there is the frustration at myself that I fall so short when I have tried to write. My effort leaves me even more in awe of your talent. Thank you for your tales!
somewhere east of Omaha
All men are predators, all women are victims. Apparently no married woman has ever entered into an affair of her own free will. That's why it's never her fault that she can't keep her legs closed. Typical misandry.
It was a good tale. Anons should register and post instead of hiding behind anons,
Considering it's length, it is a good story. Anything under 5k words is a tough sell for me. Good job.
@woodward
anons are anons for their own reasons. Is "woodward" your real name?
LWlurker
Cold, brutally honest of a woman's stupidity to herself by a woman whose been there.
What is it with woman who, very much like their male counterparts, have seek external affirmation they are still as desirable as they were in their teens an early 20s?
Just because the baby oven is going off line doesn't mean their value as a desirable woman has to die.
Great story. Well written and gets the point across without a lot of rambling, well done.
Good except for the end where I was left hanging.......I like endings spelled out. 4 stars. could've been a fiver.
Your work is always well crafted. I am glad to hear your health has improved. I. found this story to be too brief. Many good ideas and wrinkles, but it tried to cram all of it into to little space to breath freely. Like you got tired of it, or had set a word limit for yourself, not to be exceeded. Still gave me things to think about. Thank you for your efforts.
I like short tales. I think it’s harder to write a good short story than a novelette.
Anyway, 5 stars.
Bill S.
Great story, but she was right about it being to late to save the other woman’s marriage.
You'd think these cheating wives would have the brains to tell their friends to cover for them. But then again what do you expect?
One can but hope that there are more people out there who are prepared to let others know what the consequences of actions can be. The wife running home has maybe a tiny chance of salvaging things but it's probably unlikely as she's already cheated multiple times. But things happen so who knows. A short story that's effective and well written and enjoyable and makes you wonder. All anyone can ask for from an author. BardnotBard
Interesting point, does a BJ and being fingered count as as having sex? There definitely was penetration, just not coitus, but does it make a difference to the cheated on partner? Not sure how the Angel of Doom got her information, but it made a nice story.
Well written but the cheating wife (yes oral is cheating) had a terrible alibi. What an idiot. Her marriage is not going to survive. Seriously three years?
Oral is still sex it was done with someone other than her spouse that's is cheating now matter how you try to spin it and to do so after only 3 years of being married yeah that marriage is most definitely over hell a true man would divorce his wife after an affair even if he was married to his wife for 20 years there is no chance of remaining married if someone cheats not if they have any morals as far as the other girl who tried to warn her who does she think she's playing she is still fucking other men she is either got really good at hiding it or she found herself a little bitch to marry people the latter she found herself a little bitch that lets fuck other men he probably even watches her fuck them cause once a cheater always a cheater shes a cheating slut always will be she knows it that's why she's married to a bitch instead of a man she knew a man wouldn't be with her cause she's a cheating slut and cant be trusted
Oldpantythief yes it does oral sex is still sex that's why its called oral sex i mean seriously its common sense hope you are not married cause if your wife knows you don't have think a blow job or getting fingered is sex shes out fucking around on you cause you told her you wasn't a man so word of advice get a pi to follow her also get postnuptial to protect you that way she doesn't get shit from you even if you don't leave her its just a matter of time before she leaves you and file for divorce even if you haven't told her that i would get postnuptial anyway if you don't have a prenup when I was married to my first wife I had postnuptial signed and filed that was done more to protect my business but it had adultery clause as well we did divorce but she didn't cheat we decided we was better off as friends we married to young im actually married to her sister and that almost didn't happen cause she was my ex's sister but my ex worked on and worked some more on me and finally talked me into going out with my current wife and it was the best decision I made but we did sign a prenup that states if 1 of cheat we get nothing either way it protects my business it can't be touched in a divorce i trust her with my life she has the same moral values as i do when comes to a marriage we don't nor will we ever share each other even if it is another woman anyone other than your spouse stopped when you became engaged you want a threesome or wanna try swinging or swapping you do it before you get engaged and even then depending upon who it is or more importantly what you believe it shouldn't happen then either im not into swinging or swapping however I have had a threesome but it took place before I was engaged we wasn't even serious about each other at the time it ended with my ex getting pregnant which is why we got married in the first place then between being too young and unfortunately her miscarriage was too much for us to even try to make work so we split up on friendly terms she is my best friend still today
It's not about the various types of sex which calls for the divorce.
It's Trust. Do you still trust her/him?