All Comments on 'Life'

Hmm interesting story,has me intrigued a little.Rashad sounds like a black name or Indian,so I cannot wait to til you give a good description of the characters

a little on the khaotic side,lol!!

Its a realistic look at the sudden transformation of a pretty ordinary chap and worth watching out for!!!!!

First off I enjoyed this story and will definitely keep my eye on it, but I do have one criticism. You threw a lot of names at us in this chapter and not really any descriptions as to who they were. My advice would be to slow down. Take your time to evolve your characters making sure we know who they are and some of their personality before you head into the development. I would like to see your characters grow but I can't do that if I don't see what they are like to begin with.

He doesn't seem to think of his wife much do they even love each other? Samantha is supposed to be a friend yet she is all over him as soon as we meet her. Then he goes to her place not caring that his wife has just walked out on him and they fall into each others arms and rut while she is worried of being caught by two men we have no idea who they are or her relationship with them. Samantha is looking like a major slut so far. Will keep reading to see weather this makes sense one day.

Just too confusing 2*

so this is based in virginia

yes its based in va