All Comments on 'Lilliahna & Zac Ch. 00'

I like your story. Please don't give up the writing.

I liked your story. Interesting plot and well written. Very

smooth reading. Looking forward to the rest of the story.

But then, that's what it was: the beginning of a story. There are some logic flaws, starting with just what age these kids are. But conceptually, the story has promise. Keep writing.

-- KK in Texas

very emotional story that tugged at my heart strings. Looking forward to the next chapter.

What an emotional story. My heart also felt throughout this chapter as if it were being repeatibly ripped out. For a first story, this is really excellent. I'm totally hooked and will be looking forward to the coming chapters to this. Great job!! :-D