by analJayne
Well written but ended abruptly. Good news: reader wanting more means you did good. Bad news: reader also left unsatisfied. 4 stars
That was awesome....
you got 2 warm loads from that one.....in less than an hour!
flashmor65@gmail
It was a good read, and the sex was steamy. You could stand to have more of it, though.
Struth, what kind of a pub are you guys hanging out at where a bloke jerks off onto a woman's clothes? That's freakin' nasty!
Anyway, liked the story, especially the movie style opening telling you how it ended and then retelling the tale. Keep on writing!
"some guy cummed.."
cummed?
Huh?
After an orgasm, it means, you came.
"She cummed to the store with me'. "She came to the store with me".
"That was good, I came" "that was good, I cummed".
Loved it. To the point and explains your feminine point of view. Would loved to have been there to watch or take you the first time!
Rob