All Comments on 'Live from the Game Ch. 01'

Did the question of paternity ever come up? The attempt to be funny results in too many wasted words. What could have been 4-5 stars is hence worth 3 at the maximum.

Oh I like this, nice set up of characters with descriptions to suit

Good opening chapter. Stay with the cheating slut for the children??

A very interesting and enjoyable opening chapter. I laughed so hard at the introduction and character descriptions. A very cynical and self defeating protagonist in the most traumatic event in his life, is the type of bait that will have a reader hooked within the first six paragraphs. N8ce work. Looking forward to the next chapter.

A little too much back story in the beginning to keep my interest.

Nice story but way to wordy. Took four very long sentences to describe the jacket that his wife was wearing to the ball game.

I suppose this could be an interesting tale, but after this meandering introduction I don’t think so. It was like traveling from Philadelphia to Trenton via Melbourne and Buenos Aires. I’m going to pass on parts 2-5.

This is nonsensical rambling. I get setting up the plot big this is horrible …