All Comments on 'Loneliness Ch. 1'

Being the Dominant type most of the time I found I was quite tuned into Vanessa's feelings. I am soaked and I thank you for it! That wasa great story and I look forward to reading the next instalment.

Just a tip though, you need a little editing. There are some parts that have missing words, or the incorrect ones.

emerald

This is a fine story, but it's diminished by poor editing. There are no misspellings, so it's been run through a spell checker, but there are many errors in grammar. The most common one is you incorrectly use the verb "dominate" where it would have been correct to use the adjective "dominant".

If you could find someone to edit your work it would help.