All Comments on 'Love U Ch. 01'

The best Loving Wives story I have read in quite a while...

But grammar is all it has going for it. The references to this website, a website filled with the written down fantasies of bored people around the world, kills the story much like a pneumatic gun kills cattle. No way it could survive that, and the all-too frequent whining in the loving-wives category sickens me. Grow a pair, is what a lot of guys writing here needs to do. Grow a pair, and walk away from your computers and get a life too.

I liked the starting, but I would love to read why Faith had an affair with Dana. Maybe the next chapter is from her point of view?<p>By the way, what was his name? Harry or Henry? Just watch out the changes in the lead character's name<p>I think, not sure though, Carla will be with our hero? I don't think there's any "room" for reconciliation after what she did<p>Liked the way their children responded, little harsh, but she deserved it. I liked the beginning, let see what the author does in the next chapter(s)<p>No forced reconciliation please<p>P.S I'm enjoying commenting in paragraphs now =)))

Burn the bitch down. If only he had used the bat on Faith it would be perfect.

She allowed herself to think of No One but herself and ended up Paying the Piper. for a Mother not being invited to your Daughter's Wedding would hurt Almost as much as Her words against Her Husband.

Enjoyed the story except in our circle of friends it's been the husband who got stupid and screwed up the long term marriages. Short term excitment usually doesn't last but damage is done, thanks.

Good staple diet for 'loving wives' fans. Well written.

I like your delivery and story flow.

You encapsulated the anguish and heartbreak of spousal betrayal coupled with the execution of a suitable revenge against the slimy bastard and his willing cheating bitch of a wife.

Good story and I look forward to your continuation.

Thank you for one of the best 'Loving Wives' stories for a good while.

Norman

Would love to see another chapter or two...Faith's story and why she had the affair and another with Henry/Harry finding love again. Maybe a client that has a similar history. FYI to Kelly...Harry is a nickname for Henry and is used interchangebly.

The wife could not have loved the husband as much as she thought she did. This doesn't need a second chapter the wife's explaination is apparent without the need for awhole second chapter of her telling us why. Sometimes there doesn't need to be a WHY?.

All the sneaking around in back yards is a bit wearying, but overall a decent recounting of the usual.

Too bad it took nearly thirty years for him to finally see that she is a no good slut, he should have the DNA of his children checked, he might find that he isn't a father after all. The fucking cunt slut whore bitch was probably fucking around on him all of their married lives.

What a start of a good story!!! I'm not sure why it was Ch 01? The story ended perfectly. Is there going to be some reconciliation? Or will there be anyone for Henry? Sad story though, stupid women, just for few moments of pleasure she gave away her 30 years of marriage. Liked the way his kids took his side. What's going to happen is really very interesting. I don't know why but I've a feeling that there is a forced reconciliation around the corner, I maybe wrong, but who knows? But if the next chapter is from Faith's point of view, I'll be more than happy. Good story & I'm looking forward for the next chapter. Thank you for the story.

Very good story. Great follow through, and a believably controlled reaction from the husband even through intense moments of the story. Well written. :)

great ...the way it should be handled

Very enjoyable story, thanks! I appreciate the fact that the husband was not two-faced by trying to force his offspring to continue their relationship with their cheating mother while he refused to have anything to do with her. I also like the fact that you had him put the house up for sale. I hate stories where the hubby leaves it for the cheating spouse b/c he'll never enter it again. A house is a major portion of most people's net worth, so such an action is idiotic. Finally (a few very minor complaints) 1) He should not have had her fired b/c the alimony he'd have to pay will increase - but it did sound nice for the story! 2) If he had already filed for divorce the cops would find out and know that he set up Dana. They'd interview the wife and find it all out. He would be looking at some serious damages and prison time, especially since he hit Dana gratuitously in the crotch 3 times! This part was a little weak and could use some tweaking as we want him to get away with it! - TTom

Doesn't the husband says clearly and categorically the marriage is over and nothing can ever change that?

Perfect for loving wives fans.

her side of the events?

The way it flowed was perfect and the content was great. I was the right length and I loved what the son said to his new wife. At least the new wife knows that if she cheats, she is dead. That is the way it should be for husband or wife. Deep down he hurt Faith by making a deal with her employer that she would be terminated stating why. I guess that would hurt more than anything. Everyone knowing you are a cheating wife does not say much for your values.

Readers that comment usually love revenge, even if the story has holes you can drive a truck through. This was not a good story and was not well written. Having the lawyer husband take a bat to a man he was going to name in his divorce is stretching it. Going to the hospital to threaten him further was incredible. Let's hope there is no part two!

of Loving Wives as well as How Wonderful, and I didn't like it much. Just so stark and bleak. 30 years of a good marriage, a fine family, a companionable future, all ripped to shreds, stamped into the dirt...and by whom? A bored menopausal wife? An insecure unforgiving husband? Or by a thoughtless uncaring slut, a man of unyielding ethical principles? But would a man with such high moral notions really encourage her own children to turn against her? This is where I lost sympathy for him, in that he wasn't big enough to rise above his pain, and carried bitterness(which only destroys the bearer) and sounded even smug when the son threatened the life of his own young wife. Nasty. But over all I agree with JADED ONE. It's too sad a story. Thanks Bones...Mancelt

in time over and over and each time have him coming into the house for batting practice. I know this is a no no but i would also like to see a story where the wif slut is met by big Bertha , the big biker dyke and worked over like dana was. Other wise i liked your story...See I tell you if a story is good and let you know that it stinks...this ones real good.

Wow. I covet the baseball bat episode. Interesting that our loving wife would risk her marriage and her family, however, I'm sure she thought that she was "in love." The poor thing couldn't help herself, she just loved him so much. As one of the other Lit authors says, "Consequences are a bitch!"

first, violance is never the answer if you haven't learned that by now you hopeless. second, can't see any reason why you should write more than one part. this was ugly enough. no carachter is have way ok.

Well-written, keeps one interested in the flow of the story. The revenge felt nice, but obviously, the police would be suspicious and despite the "throw away" cell phone, I think our hero's movements could be traced and the "set-up" discovered. I must agree with others that our lawyer cuckold would himself end up in jail. I think he would have done much better to get hold of a "throw-away" gun and shoot Dana in the head far away from his home. Perhaps stealing Dana's money could make it appear to be a robbery gone bad. He would need to pretend carefully so that Faith would not know that he knew what she was up to. He could then quietly tell her once the time was right, possibly many years later. Other than this little plot hole, the story was attention-getting. I think this story can stand by itself and does not need a second chapter. I also hope there will be no reconciliation. Thanks for writing.

Well said, and played out smoothly, with great revenge. Are you sure you need a chapter 2? You wouldn't be planning a wimp out would you?

I do not recommend following his blue print for getting revenge. If he really did name the guy in his suit for divorce he set himself up too. This does not worry me

because my own reaction would have been immediate violence, followed by catch an airplane to another country, followed

by losing my identity..... Hmm perhaps suicide is wimpish, but I have no desire to share a cell with Bubba. Fun to read!

"She asked what I was talking about and I related what had happened during the evening. She thought about it a moment and then said, "I'm sorry dear. I should have made sure you were included. But that doesn't excuse your actions as a host." She is either a fucking moron, or a selfish bitch... no two people married for that long could go thru an evening as you described without BOTH knowing exactly what was going on. At this point, why would any reader give a shit about what was happening between these two? I would have thrown the asshole out in the middle of the dinner and the wife would have followed unless she could come up with some real good arguements on why she had allowed her relationship with this person get so out of hand.

into nothing. Let the bitch rot in hell.

A very well written story about a non-wimp. I think he should've taken some revenge on his ex-wife, too, besides just the termination. I liked the way he dealt with the burglar.

...the comment from the ebonic speaking liberal-basher is priceless!What a piece of work that neo-con buffoon is!"Hey asshole!-I'm pistolpackinliberal pete from hiram maine-Dwajkhul@earthlink.net Drop me a line panty-boy and I'll tell you how to keep that head up the ass permanently, so you don't trash the net with your failed attempts at communication.I love conservatives,they are walkin'talkin' proof that the more educated one is,the more tolerant and hence"liberal" one is likely to be.Gee, I guess that's why all the states with high percentages of college grads are liberal.Oh well "who needs educashion anywho.We gots Dubble-u and Billy beer!"-now you know why I am PISTOLPACKINpete in NewEngland-(the real America!LOL)

This guy has nads the size of a bull, not to mention the fact I enjoyed this story as one of the best to date. R.T.

The money from the employer should have been part of the deal, for him. She made her choices, as did he; and the full measure of revenge against them.

It was a five. A bit contrived but all in all well worth my score.

Thank you for writing

It flowed, didn't lag and the grammar and spelling worked well as far as I could see. I don't remember anything jarring.

when your on the cheatin" part of town. TK U MLJ LV NV

Naturaly 5 stars. However I prefer the Romantic Revenge Stories, where the exhusband finds a newer mate. The grandfather role is all right, but he can be grandfather beside a new woman mate.

Thank you my friend for a very enjoyable story. It was a fun read.

This story could well have occurred in real life and with a slight modification or two it probably has again and again. The sadest character in the story is the wife, she probably tried to blame her rampant infedilty on "the change in life" or raging hormones. But more likely than not it was a selfish, vanity and copious quantities of stupidity ! Having an affair as you reach your golden years, destroying your marriage and your husband's love, casting hate and loathing over your own kids and topping it all off allowing yourself to become pregnant to another man who in less than two years would leave you----that is amazing and really fucking dumb. Hope she finds love in her lumberyard job----lol.

Good revenge on a cheating skank slut whore wife and her asshole lover. She should die in pain.

HA

When one has been poisoned by cabbage, it is best to avoid the vegetable in future

I guess it is nothing to hear a story about a lawyer who has no regard for the law, letter or spirit.

you use what you got and where it is most effective, TK U MLJ LV NV

if all men you know get physically sick because slut wives drop them

if they were not sickly excuses for men, they might keep the wives

attempt to read 2 of ur stories but enuff is enuff.

1*;;;; too many

But why does the antiquated alienation of affection trope get dragged out in every story? Especially when it's so damnably hard to prove and is rarely worth anything even in the few backwards jurisdictions where it's still on the books?

Needed more. Aftermath details. What the hell.the stupid cunt was thinking?

4* anyway.

All those cheaters need a Louisville Slugger to the balls !

Are the kids' marriages in doubt?

In most states, if you get the wife fired, you’re going to be stuck with at least rehabilitative alimony for some period of time, regardless of the grounds (cause) of the divorce. This so she won’t become a ward of the state and be entitled to welfare and other state assistance.

Destroying the whore and her asshole lover was great, but like Duna below, I prefer the wronged husband to get a happy ending. Still, 5* for giving the lover a beating and for Faith being disowned by her kids.

Sorry 3 stars attorney and don't know about alimony

How did he find out about pregnancy and abortion

Include a mailing of that

Reading again. This is a good story. Catch the lying, cheating bitch and burn her down. Good job on Dana too.

And then he went to prison having effectively made the case against him for the police. 🙄

3 stars - the author pretty well followed the LW BTB script - nothing new or unique in this story.

These stories amuse the hell out of me - the aggrieved hubby’s sitting in their lab concocting all sorts of sinister revenge plots, with planning more intricate than the DDay landings - when all they really need to do is just leave and file - which in essence is a lot more dignified …….

Good stick work on the asshole, and the cheating bitch should have gotten some of the same.

Over the top revenge

What is it with all these authors endlessly stating, well, one time or short term affair I could live with and be ok…….Really, one time is ok, then how about two, or five, where is the line. Just another example of how many wuss men are around and how othe everyday thinking is being changed, advanced by fems etc, that one time is ok, or more… sure it is.

Good job on the punishment meted out to Dana, he should've had his balls destroyed.

An entertaining tale, well done

Hmmmm ! Still your stories evoke no emotion. Reads alot like a newspaper report. You need to figure out how to develop the characters such that we can identify with them, like then, feel sorry fir them. Something !! A 3 for effort. Keep writing.

I do not like gratuitous violence.

OK story but I have to agree with many that why watch all this happen? Just tell her what you know and be done with her. Sure, if you can beat the guy, or even the wife, AND GET AWAY WITH IT then fine. But seriously it may feel good at the time but off you get caught they are not worth the jail time.