by RedEmerald
I just couldn't stop. I had to keep reading it to find out what happened. Amazing. In the years that I have been visiting this site I have never left a comment until now. And thanks for the 'where are they now' blurb at the end. Please keep writing.
This is THE best story I've read on Literotica in 10 years.
The story is phenomenal but what is even better:
IT IS THE FIRST TIME I HAVE EVER READ A STORY ON THIS SITE
WITHOUT A SINGLE SPELLING OR GRAMMATICAL MISTAKE!!!
I am delighted at the opportunity to read a great story without the annoying interruption of poor spelling, grammar, syntax or even simple punctuation.
Congratulations. Your commitment to excellence is greatly appreciated.
A wonderful story, not only fantastic, inspiring sex, but a story that kept you with the writer. Well done. The best lesbian story I've read in a while.
But this one was too fantastic for me to not leave one! Thanks for the great story....it made me laugh from the beginning and left me with a smile at the end.
Just wanted you to know this. This is my favorite story on Lit. It’s an incredibly erotic piece. More so because of the emotions displayed by the girls in the story. That’s what got me. I know you’ve received tremendous praise because of this work, and mine in just one of many, but this, this story, well it moved me. You are an incredible writer, and I say that just not to suck up. May you continue to spin tales such as this.
A fantastic read. The depth and detail in which you tell their story is amazing. Anyone who can't appreciate this obviously cannot comprehend true art. I've never been able to come without even touching myself until I read this. Great job!
The first time erotica has ever made me touch myself and yearn for the contact that occured between Diane and Jessie was after reading this tantalizing visual display of sex and lust nd of course love. This is an amazing story and I hope to read more
Some people write and it's entertaining. Others write and it's like a sculptor or painter, turning the every day into a piece of art that you swear you could stare at forever and a day.
It needs a guilded frame and a room all of its own.
E.A.G
Absolutely captivating! Some of the best writing I've seen in a while!
Brilliant story, I really loved it. Incredible read. Made me cum like crazy.
I started with page one and wanted to stop to cum at the end of page 1 but made myself read the entire thing i practicly was cumming before i had my pants down.
What a story! Thank you for writing this one and the other. I have been searching for new authors to look out for here in Literotica and now there's you. Keep the story coming, please! I love the story themes that you're writing!
I could not put this story down. I cames so many times I'm raw now. :) I can not wait for the next one!
Beautifully written. Believable story with a plot. The notion that this is a true story made it even more exciting. I came three times as I read your erotic rendition. This was Hot. Looking forward to more orgasms with you.
I have to admit, the ending didn't really work for me, but I know how hard it is to write soppy endings that don't come across as forced and awkward.
As for the story as a whole, I found it sweet, sexy and above all, believable. You're an excellent writer with a knack for description.
RedEmerald, I am speechless. What a magnificent story. Easily, EASILY the best I've read here. Please give us more.
Brilliant! Fabulous! Romantic! Hot! Everything that makes the perfect story, you are definitely one of my favorites now! keep writing, you're great! Can't wait for your next!
awsome story i loved it cause it wast just o this girl was hot so... it had plot it had background and the chicks a lawyer who dosent like that u really brought actual facts into it to anyway great story tell them thanks for sharing
Such a descriptive, intelligent, loving, truly awesome story; erotica in its true sense (as opposed to pornography).
THANK YOU for sharing it with me.
Also for letting us know that 'Jessica' and 'Diane' are still a couple
I find myself thinking that you the Author are likely 'Jessica'
I've never left a comment before, and I'm also very discerning about what I read. Your story... blew me away. Truly. Their story is beautiful but how much more so with the words of their dance in your hands.
I loved this story for so many reasons. "RedEmerald", you are good and I hope your first posting is not your last. I was thinking about your footnote at the end. As in any relationship, ones that last are ones where the individuals understand giving without a selfish agenda. Jessie, while it seems she has a personal agenda, she lays it aside to help Diane. She also enjoys what she can until she believes that Diane knows that she, Jessie, really cares. I also enjoyed this because it was based on "reality", someone that you have known for a long time. Watching for your next story.
I really enjoyed your story: very well written indeed. Interesting and realistic characters, good plot, well-paced, wonderfully descriptive and extremely erotic.
I rarely leave comments, but I couldn't let this one go without saying something. I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Here's hoping it is only the first of many!
...for this fabulous story. Lesbian erotica at its best.
And the way the oral scenes were written. Perfect.
That is how cunnilingus is supposed to be portrayed. Delicious.
An absolutely fantastic story. Great prose, fantastic tension and use of words... my comments can't really do it justice. Absolutely wonderful. I'm glad two women can find such happiness x
This story only confirms my need to be with another woman for the first time. A friend of mine is reading this story right now and i'm hoping she get as turned on as i did so we can finally cross our boundries that have been keeping us apart. With any luck i'll have a story to write about my first time with another woman.
Wow, this story is so wonderful! A lot of thoughts are running through my mind, but I can only summarize them by saying "WOW!!!"
One of the best stories I've ever read here - and I'm reading stories from Literotica for a veeery long time now. ;-)
Fantastic story - perfectly paced, hot as hell and wonderfully sweet too! Cant wait for your next story, please, please don't leave us waiting too long. Top of the list - deservedly so!
that Coleen Thomas carried for so long. As a first story, who knows. But as a history hopefully develops, wouldn't that be grand.
Great piece of writing for a first time contributor. There is not as many good lesbian stories recently, and I am very pleased that you have helped to change that.
I love every minute of it. Awesome! It was so sweet and sexy The story kept me joked to the very end.
Thank your for an awesome story *thumbs ups*
An outstanding story for your first attempt. Very well written. Just an absolute great read.
Hope to read many more of your stories soon.
Thank you for such an enjoyable story.
What a great story, an in-depth look at a unique situation, and a nice job of exploring the feelings and thoughts associated with it. Great job, would love to read more about these two characters!
Excellent first piece... I hope you don't think you can write something that good and then leave us. :)
Excellent submission for a first-timer. The characters were very well defined, and the story was very hot! I'd like to read more about these women.
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I am drenched! I managed to hold off coming until the very end - don't know how, but I did. My pussy is still tingling, nearly fifteen minutes later.
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Thank you, thank you, thank you, for one of the best ever stories on here...xx
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PS: If you ever need (half) a bed in Seattle...
The story thrilled me. It's concept -- true or not -- was excellent and the writing was good. Technically it was also good -- probably about the right length for a beginning story and with nice grammar (that's not always so in these tales.) I hope you continue writing and can find other lawyers not to hurt.
I really loved it. It’s the second best story I’ve read here this year. Keep writing more.