by DSDS1993
This was a good start. Please continue the story.
Overall a competently written outing. Just one comment to our British friends: you should translate it to American. In the US, 'mum' more often than not means be quiet, or an old bitty. A young sexy mom is called a 'mom' or other terms.
I've been reading stories on literotica long enough to know that any author whose first story is only one page long almost always sucks at writing. I used to give him/her the benefit of the doubt by reading the whole story but I always come to the same conclusion: it sucks. This story is no exception.
Story was ok. It could do with being fleshed out more.
To our American "friend", please don't tell the English how to use our own language. The short form of "mother" is "mum" always has been, and always will be probably. If you are unable to cope with that, perhaps night school will help.
Remember that the English language existed long before America was colonised by Europeans.
Enjoyed the stoiry very much. Don't stop writing and ignore the pundits!
to think he has the right to tell someone how to spell in an English story. A host of Americanisms (gas, pants, etc. etc.)mean something different to the rest of us but we are too polite to moan about it all the time. Perhaps, when US society matures enough to feel a moral obligation to pay sufficient tax to look after its own elderly citizens properly, Americans will eventually grow to show more acceptance of other cultures.
He goes to work to makes money for the family.
Puts up with all the shit and harassment there.
Comes home to run around slut and, she stabs him in the back.
Sounds fair.
Time for chapter two. I really liked it, and if they didn't there are PLENTY of them that are a LOT worse than this. Well done.
I don't too often get involved in comment-disputes on these story-forums, but this is one place in which I felt just a bit obligated to post my own opinion.
First, I will wholeheartedly agree that it was quite rude of the American reader to suggest that UK-based authors take time to "Americanize" terms in their stories. Quite frankly, the notion is ridiculous on the face of it, and further, I've always enjoyed seeing the various "Briticisms" that appear in such tales, as they enrich the story by adding a form of "local color" that helps most of us readers to "picture" things in the story in more detail.
That said, I simply MUST take issue with the way our two "cousins from across the Pond" chose, to respond to that crass suggestion.
How quickly some of you Britons seem to forget that, were it not for "arrogant Americans", the population of the UK would all be speaking German. It was OUR military might, and our "Yankee ingenuity" as applied to developing weaponry, that changed the course of World War II. It was legions of those "arrogant American" soldiers who died, defending YOUR freedom, as well as attempting to keep our own homeland free from the threat of invasion.
Now, as to the same fellow, who seems to think he has a leg up on Americans where "morality" is concerned, there are a couple other salient points he or she needs to consider. And, so that there is no "error in translation", I'm going to define a couple terms for you.
But, first, here's a really nasty thought to consider: Again, if it had not been for the American military, you Britons would HAVE no senior citizens to worry about. Based on the way the Third Reich did business, anyone too old or too infirm to continue to work and contribute to the growth of the Reich would have been "euthanized", so as not to be a DRAIN on society's pockets!
Now, on to the terms:
Social Security - payments out of tax revenues, made to the senior citizens of America, and to a vast number of younger Americans who are disabled and thus cannot work and earn a proper living.
Medicare - government payments covering roughly 80% of the cost of all medical care for those same senior citizens and disabled individuals.
Currently, Social Security and Medicare account for nearly two-thirds of all the expenditures made annually by the United States government. Payments made out of the remaining third of our annual tax revenues include the support of the American military, domestic and international disaster relief, hundreds of billions of dollars worth of foreign-aid gifts to hundreds of third-world nations, and the "payroll" and other expenses associated with simply running a government that employe more people than the total populations of the UK's eight largest cities, combined.
And you accuse us of being less-than-moral because we do not grant our elderly a 100% government-paid retirement? Far more Americans, currently, in our 60's, are also looking after our parents - either in their own homes (which they own, not rent) or in our own homes courtesy of building on additions. It's my understanding that some 70% of all Britons never have, nor ever will, actually OWN their own home, and that it's been that way for several generations. Must be great, to be rich enough to be a British landlord and have a whole host of flats to let out to tenants at exorbitant prices!
If you Britons are content to subsidize your government with well over half your paychecks each week, go for it. If you enjoy waiting for weeks just to get to see a doctor, well, we here in America will be there in the queue with you, come 2014, when our own "nationalized health care" kicks in.
But please don't have the gall to call us "arrogant". You need to remember that, whenever you point a finger at another person, the remaining three fingers are pointing right back at YOU!
Loved the story, would love further plot developments in future installments.
btw Americans, whats so wrong about speaking German? i personally dont care what the language is i speak. nor do i care what americans did (in their honest opinion)for britain 60 years ago. If your contribution did have such an impact on the course of the war, does that mean we can blame the length of the European aspect of the war upon America's original stance of "Its a European War, not our prob"? (You didnt join in till '42, and only your western fleets were occupied by the japanese)
A great story, loving but very erotic.
I'll be watching for the next chapter.
Thanks for the good read
this is a story about mother and son making the beast with 2 backs not war so shut up and as i have done and get urself off
Everything happened so quick. No lead up. No temptation. No questioning the taboo. Mom just went from typical mom to dirty slut in 5 seconds.
It is true that the mother gives in too easily, the story nonetheless is sexy. I liked the aggressiveness of the mother; in particular her asking to be fucked in her asshole.
Short and to the point. Love the Mother being a slut. Lucky young man to have such an available and easy Mother that he can fuck and use.
Exceptionally naughty and makes you wish you were Dan.
Wonderful story. Your Story shows a lot of Promise as a writer. You have wonderful prose diction and grammar, and I can only imagine how much better you'll even get as you continue to write these stories, please write a sequel. I love British women
I just it when you upcap a situation and it explodes into a Fantasy that blows both of you out of the water.. Great story.. every guys fantasy
Hope you got your mom pregnant.got my mom aunt and two sisters pregnant then my friends came over had one big gangbang with mom my aunt plus two sisters all four woman end up getting pregnant again by different guys had the kids
Loved the way the story progressed, I got so hard before I knew it I was squeezing my cock and and so into being with mum I had hot juce all over me, ty!
OH, THAT WAS SO EASY, WHY CAN'T
MORE MOMS BE LIKE HER. WELL DONE
EASY READ...THANKS...
USAF
This story was so fast moving I a surprised they waited so long!
Reading this reminded me of my mommy and I. we had so much fun and still do on occasion.
Story was great kept me erect whole time.
I wish I would have fucked my mom.
Bob
I am a 72 year old widow with two adult sons. The two of them have enjoyed using my body ( Fucked me) since they were teenagers. Not as often as before, but they still do on occasion, and YES, we have had some 3-somes together...both have fucked my ass
I thought contend was great and believable. I never had any opportunity with my mom but my aunt was just like this mom. My aunt had no children and I was a regular sleep over at her home. My uncle was a workaholic and I spent a number of days and occassionally in summer a week or more. I remember the morning she came in to wake me and she whispered in my ear that she wanted me to fuck her in the ass. I was 16 at the time and had not even heard of assfucking. She was great and one of the nicest, nastiest horny woman I have ever known.
When I was fifty and divorced I moved in with her and we started where we left off some years before. The kinkiest thing we ever did was pissing in her ass. She was out of the old school of enemas and I was the one suggesting that a piss enema would be nice for her......I wish she was still around. I live with a 76 year old woman that is similar in nastiness and she is standing behind me now playing with herself....
5 Stars. Great story, don't stop, I've got a feeling mom and Dan are going to become great fuck buddies back home.