All Comments on 'Lynn and Leif Forevermore Ch. 03'

I like the pace, and that Leif is patient enough to go as slowly as Lynne needs. Keep the updates coming. I'm really enjoying this story.

This story continues to get better with each chapter

Five.

All this shit about color not being a problem when really it's color not being a problem so long as he's not black. you would think that someone who wants to be seen as smart would realize how ignorant it is to stereotype an entire race of men it would have been better if she switched over to women from her bad experience with a man that would have went over better with. She's basically reafferming the idea that being one color or another makes you a good or bad person.

Ridiculous comment.

but sometimes the dialogue is a bit much for me and it doesn't match up to the way you describe it in the end. Some of the things they were saying were so passionate I was wondering why you insisted on saying "He said softly or she added softly".

Hi Everyone, thank you for your comments. I appreciated the kind words, and the constructive criticism. Thank you all for following these two on their journey. This is my first real story for literotica, so I appreciate all the love.

Island QT, I re-read my dialogue, and I understand what you mean, about adding the softly after some of the passionate statements that were being made.

I guess I did that because I didn't want it to seem as though they were yelling at each other- but your point is well taken.

This is scary! It's like your writing about my life right now! Down to every detail( except location) haha nice story!

This story is great all those comments about race and what the characters said about race are ridiculous...its an interracial story RACE HAS TO COME UP!!

and besides its fiction!!! Relax and just enjoy the story.

I love this