All Comments on 'Making The Cake'

that was quite hot!

The story was excellent but you need to do some work on your editing or find someone who will edit for you. Mostly spelling errors or mixed up words but it still can distract the reader from what you are writing about. Good job, I look forward to reading more stories by you.

Follow the advice and get an editor or proof reader.

Loved the story and please keep posting.

While this was a wonderful read, it requires editing. Easy enough to find an editor with writing as good as yours.

Come back, write more. This is an older story, but I'll be damned if it's not one of the better ones I've read