All Comments on 'Marian and Ryan'

Overall, a good read. There are some points to work on, such as the dialog repeating itself (even moans and groans should be changed slightly) to keep the fantasy alive.

But good job.

My first experience was very similar to Ryan's. I was 13 instead of 18 and I was scared to death of getting into trouble. However, there was a divorced woman down the street who had asked me to mow her lawn and I wound up tending her in other ways.

Nookiehunter

Quite the attention to details.....enjoyed it immensely! Cant wait to read the next chapter!