All Comments on 'Marie and the Costume Shop'

It's the old shoe store gambit retooled. Not badly retooled, though!

I'm going to gp out on a limb here and guess you've never heard of editing? I had a hard time with following the story because there are some things you need to fix:

Repetition- you say the same words too closely together. "Manly aroma, manly aroma, aroma, aroma. " , "Baby, babe, babe" ,"cock, his cock, cock" and more I can't even remember, I couldn't get through it. They were in too close of proximity so it just sounded ridiculous.

Your and You're- Y-o-u-r means "belonging to you" and Y-o-u-'-r-e means "You are"

Spell check- self explanatory.

Re-reading through your stories before submission can help you weed out these problems in the future. If you "did re-read it, I have no idea what you mean" Get. An. Editor.

Thanks