by Harry_Ballsack
the story line is there, your characters need names. the repetitive "the slave" and "the Master" take away form the story. I think you should leave the story line as it is, but I would consider revamping this story by changing only the element of Character names.
I wouldn't change a thing! I did not expect that tk be as hot and dirty as it was. I'm leaking pre-cum now. Filthy! :)
Reminds me of how things were with my Master and how I loved every minute of it. Going to read the next meeting now and likely pound myself and swallow it.
loved your story - actually has a lot of similarities to what happened to me when I first met my online SIR except for the clothespins, he used the crop a lot more
I thought is was extremely hot and exciting. I would love to have that happen to me.
A well written and very arousing story. I so want to be used in the same way as slave.