by karma_bonds
I like this pretty unconventional start.
Very fitting to a dragon's tale, indeed ... so, where does she go from there ?
Interesting and unusual. Please continue- it was a fun read.
Great story full of lots of fun. Can't wait to read what happens next.
Well Written. Had a lot of background. Would love to read more. Keep up the good work.
is that you have a great story telling ability.
the not so good news is that your English sucks.
this piece needs editing and you need to learn to write in English as long term it is not an editors job to replace the writers ability to use proper sentences.
this may well be important to you as I suspect that you will ultimately be published if you persist.
I do agree that you do have a nice way in telling and putting some wity treats in your writing. But i also agree that some of your sentences are so confusing. Like you lost your tracks.
Cant wait for the next chapters for i've bookmarked this story, chayooo!
good read...... I really enjoyed this and I am not into vampire stuff ....butI was intrigued by it ...the way you set up the story ...it drew me in....I am a reader ...and I found the story easy to follow and wouldn't bother with people who complain about the editing .
What kind of ending is that! It sucks! I was all into the story; enjoying it and BAM! It gets cut off at the beginning of the story. For that I give it 2 stars. If It had been continued on the same thread, I would have given it a 4 at least.
What the hell was that ending? The flow of the story was starting to get nice and interesting but then you ended it that way. D: if you're going to continue with the story the better, I would love it if you would continue with the story. :) it would really be a waste to not continue with it. :) This was really great. :)