All Comments on 'Mattison House'

check it before you submit it. the one or two errors are not hard to spot. The story really made me horny & my cock hard. Im bi & could imagine orally servicing them.

there are a few errors...Everybody is an arm chair editor. This was hot and sexy!!!

i am delighted and my experience is reinforced by your picture and your very sexy story. when i was younger i wanted a lot of makeup...etc..in women who attracted me. i have learned a long time ago a beautiful, tasteful young woman such as you enjoys sex as much as anyone. as a metter of fact, i bet you can suck cock, eat pussy, drink cum and flat out fuck better than most women. have a great life.

it didnt turn me on because there were too many adjectives and not enough happened. it takes 5 lines to say he licked her out

I liked it for the reasons the first person didn't.

Enjoyed this very much

You did a wonderful job with this. You have alot of promise. Forget the bad remarks and keep writing, Please.

I got less than 1/2 way before scanning to the end.

So who were these strange, unbelievable characters? Did they drift in from another story - or from the ether?

Do I care? No.

Lukas

i thoroughly enjoyed the story despite the hiccups. do keep the story going, i would like to see where you take the characters.

Not a realistic opening scenario.