by sushilkumer
You need to have your work proof read and edited. Please do not take this negatively. Your story is good, however it can be better. Try to develop the story slowly over a number of events. Stories with a Hindi/Desi flavour are in great but alas we do not have skilled writers to cater to this audience. I hope you try better next time.
I like stories of brothers and sisters.
My sister is eleven years younger than me and was too young. When she reached eighteen I was twenty-nine and seeing WOMEN.
I think that I would have liked it if we were closer in age. Twenty vs eighteen would have been great. I am sure that either she or I would have found a way to get together but it never happened and never will.
keep up the good stories.