by SpotInTheSand
I loved the story. Something that was left wonky is now set aright. Would make a great X-rated Halmark movie. >;^) (old school: sly winking devilish tongue-in-cheek grin)
I loved the Rita timeline thread throughout the story. It took real writing chops to work that out. Five big stars!
I am thrilled with this story. Wish I had read it much sooner. It hit me in a place I rarely discuss. Thank you for it
Well-crafted with full-bodied characters and a compelling storyline. Well done!
This is really good writing, outstanding... Keep wielding that pen for the pen is mightier than the sword!!!
Wonderfully scripted, and written with words conveying feelings just right. Goes onto one of my "Favorites" Liste. 5*
Fun read. I was expecting the former husband to breakout and cause a situation, but it didn’t happen for the better of the story.
What dgfergie said. The dude was slow on the uptake, then got his tail in a twist over it, but at least he figured it out and pulled his head out of his ass quick enough so she didn't have to suffer unnecesarily too awfully long. Good story. 5.
Can't understand what he got upset about when he found out this hot chic from his past was stalking him, can you? The second time he met her I knew she was stalking him but not why. Hell when puberty hit I followed a girl all the way home. She was on a bus and I was on my bike. Never did talk to her. Hey! when cupid hits what are you going to do? Good story.
Sweet romance but didn't cotton on to the connection to Rita until almost too late.nicely written and we'll thought out. 5⛤
First mother/daughter NPC was a red herring, although I thought they might appear later as Brittney's local friend. (Which didn't jibe with her needing someone else to shop while already in story yesterday.) Also thought that Western-Turkey station was Karamasel, the only base in country with a full-size base exchange. Izmir had F80 Shooting Star squadron when I was there in 1977. Nice story. Gave it 5 stars
Anon56
Great. Story not. The first time to read it and will not be the ĺast. 5 stars. Plus
Really, really good. I sure wish I'd read it back then. 5 stars, for sure!
ok, i think i've been on lit too long. after i loaded this story and looked at the tags, i saw, "mile high." knowing my interests, etc., i immediately thought, "this story better be at least 8 pages or i'm not going to be interested." so i scroll to the bottom of the screen, and of course, 8 pages. wtf. unfortunately, i can't read this right now because i have to be up for work in 8 hours, so hopefully i get a chance to read this tomorrow.
So the skank Kira got him fired yet she was exposed for her affairs.....where the payback/revenge here!!
Brittany's meeting from the outset was based on lies....from the name/surname to knowing him....how is this kosher!! Just another lying skank in his life
a "lifetime Movie" script. I just didn't need the references to 3some sex. true love is just 2 people.
Great story. Nicely unfolded for us. Characters had depth and seemed to hold true to the as the story progressed. So many little nuances to their relationship. I can understand her reluctance to jinx the karma developing. I can also empathize with his uneasiness as the truth was revealed. I am glad he chose to respond as he did. Meet the parents is such an all round perfect win for everyone. This is at least twice I have read this story. I’ll probably read again too.
I am always so astonished at the cowardly anon commenters who want to pick at the mechanics and overlook the immense creativity that has been shared with us. These belligerent AH should be barred from commenting. So what if the grammar or tense or pronoun is not what the establishment says is correct. The majority of people I know make similar miscues in conversation daily. Only the narrow minded elitist AH get their Lacey Panties in a wad over trivia crap such as that. My guess is they could not string two paragraphs of creative writing together if their life hung in the balance. This is a free site where people share their work (hours and hours of work) just because they want to share. All of this supposed incorrect writing style, grammar, spelling, and pronoun use is just jealousy and feeble attempts to call attention to their own stupidity. If it is so bothersome to them, they should be volunteering their time to edit for free the many authors who share their creativity on this site. My guess the little dick AH will cringe at the thought. Wonder how many “editorial mistakes” I made in my comments. Who gives a flying rat’s ass about it’s?
I hope you continue to share your creativity here. Thanks John
great story the 2nd time thru. Brings our evening with Clint Black singing this with my smiling wife at my side to mind.
I agree with those who defend the author's writing. Hey, we all make grammar mistakes. That being said loved the story. And for you Nazi gramstoppo, fucking learn how to autocorrect in head....
Thoroughly enjoyable story I do so hate people who pick on minor errors of spelling
Spotinthesand, great story. Too bad you ruin it with your assholish response to reasonable grammar corrections. And you clearly need the lesson, because you made that same pronoun mistake a metric shitton of times.
Glad to have read it- again. Just one little niggle, not as much a critique as a report of a little collision between what I'd like to read in a romantic story, ideally, and the hints given toward the MC's understanding of a commitment. It seems that Brittany, Kevin and Alicia are on their way to becoming a family. In my world their'd be no room for threesomes or similar such things, but then again, it's not my story.
Re: Anonymous from 4-3-21 (because of course you're anonymous... wouldn't want to actually sign even an internet username to such an assholish comment):
Please take your condescending, obtuse, worst-kind-of-elementary-school-English-teacher grammar Naziism somewhere-the-fuck else. If you read all 8 pages of this story and that's the best you got, then you're completely and totally missing the point of a free erotic literature website. Take your well-worn copy of the Elements of Style into the bathroom with a bottle of Jergens and GTFOH.
Pronoun help needed.
“This was a ritual for he and I.”
Now, let’s break it down:
This was a ritual for he. Sounds funny. How about you
try: This was a ritual for him. Sounds better, doesn’t it?
OK, now, how about: This was a ritual for I. Also sounds funny. So, try: This was a ritual for me. Sounds better, right?
Put it all together and you get: This was a ritual for HIM and this was a ritual for ME. Shortened you get the final result of:
This was a ritual for him and me.
When using multiple pronouns you use the same form as if you were using them individually.
And I loved every page of it. I think it’s ironic (or maybe just weird) that this story kind of revolved around bad winter weather in the DFW area. As I write this comment, I’m sitting in the big middle of the DFW metromess, it’s 10 degrees outside, snowing like crazy, and there’s already 4 or 5 inches on the ground. Cool. Really cool. This one is absolutely Five Stars. Thanks, SITS.
Another amazing story. I have no idea if you won the contest eight years ago, but I can't imagine anything being better than that. You are definitely of the best authors I've read on this site and I can't wait to read your new stuff
Screw the Pronoun Problems!
Great read. And Made me think of my first wife also. We always shared a palte of assorted cookies and a glass of milk even way back in high school, made everyone else too jealous.. This made me miss her terribly; she succumbed to cancer 11 years ago.
I am just glad I allowed myself to love again. And glad she came on to me with milk and cookies.
I enjoyed it. Didn’t hurt that the story took place in the area I’ve lived in for the last few decades. The comment about the Rangers choking in the World Series made me laugh. I remember that event well. Anyway, good job with the story, just ignore the nitpicking nellies. They obviously have too much free time on their hands.
Walmart; really? Maybe next time consider HEB when setting a story? Just a thought.
Great story!
Yes, me agree... so flagrant that through 7+ years, 80+ comments, 100+ private feedback messages, more than 1000 votes and 130,000 views... not ONE person mentioned it. Several eyes looked over it before it published, at least one pair of which belongs to someone who writes for a living... no one thought to mention it.
Since we're dishing out lessons, though, let I speak for a minute about tone. Had your comment read "The story was ok (using your descriptor) but a couple of grammar things killed it for me.. __insert grammar quibbles here__" my reply would have been something along the lines of "Thanks for the constructive criticism.. it was a long writing and editing process and I guess I missed a couple things. Glad it didn't stop you from getting all the way through." Since you decided to be a complete ass in your comment though, I did the same with my reply. If the occasional mistake is going to cause you not to enjoy reading, I suggest you find someone else to read. Better yet, find another website, and stop reading fiction, too. Peer-reviewed medical journals might be more your cup of tea.
When will you ever learn how to use pronouns?
Give her the book.
Give me the book.
Give her the book and give me the book.
Therefore: Give her and me the book.
NOT: Give she and I the book.
One uses the same pronouns when combined as one uses when they are by themselves. You did this repeatedly in this otherwise ok story. I know I’ll be called a grammar Nazi but such flagrant abuses of our language that make no sense need to be called out.
In my favorites not the first or last time to read it. What do you have in mind for a sequil a follow story about them. I think it's a great idea.
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Like many others, I enjoyed this story. It is not so much about the sex as the connection of two people who obviously need each other. I also agree there is material for other stories, but do not feel that threesomes preclude love of two people.
But the threesome comment proved it wasn't. He was OK with his wife being a slut just not OK he wasn't included in the fun. He never loved her nor will he ever love Brittany if he can allow a threesome in the future...
Thank you for a great story. It was very romantic and it also brought home the point that there needs to be communication in a relationship. Don't hide anything from your future wife. It may cost you dearly in the future. I was very thankful that they both brought out their past to clear the air. Awesome story.
Not my first read of it. Held my attention all the way. Just curious what happened to Kiara the ex wife. I bet you could write a story about her not from when they first met but into there relationship and than getting caught and her feelings and comments about the blow up of her marriage and life after
Ron--cowboyridecc@yahoo
Greatly enjoyed reading this romantic story. Like to read Christmas-themed stories during the holidays, so may read this one again when they come around.
Yes! Great read, I hope they live happily ever after, and have lots more kids. Five Stars!
Just to good to stop reading again for I can't remember how many times.
Ron
To those who feel like mentioning a threesome (or actually having one) means it's not a true love story and not truly romance... you're entitled to your opinion, and I respect it, but I do not share it. Love is whatever you make it. I've seen polyamorous relationships that worked, and those that didn't. I've seen regular relationships that were ruined by bringing in other sexual partners, and those that were enhanced and strengthened by it. Love, respect and communication are key. After those things are established, if both partners are down with it, then in my opinion, anything goes. I'm sorry if the mere mention of a possible threesome turned you off and made this less than a perfect romantic experience for you, but it simply means you are not wired the same as Kevin (or me). It doesn't make any of us wrong.
To milk and cookies what a great name for a story and so good that they met a second time. Some lines could have been left out but all in all a very good love story.
5 stars and in my favorites.
Ron
But one line EXTEMELY turned me totally off. So the character is OK with a threesome because he is open minded, but lies and dishonesty are a killer for him. Does this mean he would still be with his first wife if she would have told him she was fucking other men on the side??? Is he OK with his near future wife fucking other men if she has told him or he can watch??? A threesome works both ways one man two women or one woman and two men JUST to be fair. Yes the story is a romance, but true love was absolutely KILLED with that useless one liner. There is ZERO true love with your spouse if you want others or are ok to share...
Really a great story.
I loved it all, sweet and sentimental, with a certain erotic touch and interesting links with Kevin and Brittany's childhood (not a usual name for a girl of Hispanic descent, although Rita is). There is a saying that in love, all weapons are valid, even white lies, if they are only used once and confessed their use.
I wish there was a sequel to this story, although I know it is old and the author had plans to write other stories.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
Where's the button that allows me to provide more than five stars...?
Amazing story...
Even if he were mad at her, I can see that, as difficult as it would be, he should give her a one free to make up for what HE did when younger...
And with the world getting smaller, it was interesting to have her whole "stalking" laid out... Almost a "How could she NOT find him?" kind of thing...
Once again, well worth the read, definitely going in my favorites.
What a wonderful love story! The part about him not liking liars, maybe she should have reminded him of how he treated her on their real "first date"!
Adored the romance part of the story and the sex was great! Keep writing!!
JJMemaw0623
Such a tender and warm love story. I guess love is better the second time around as long as in this case it is the same two people. His wife used her body to do her job she was found out and wanted to make nice. I guess the cat was a better judge of character then he was. Great story and in my favorites
Ron/cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Finished the Road Trip Series and just had to have more. Milk and cookies did not dissapoint!! You are very talented, please don't take too long for some more!!! You have a gift for writing!
I have read all your stories and am anxiously awaiting the blending of the stories. Please contact me.
In my favorites not the first time to read it. I guess it is true love is better the second time around as long as you have Milk and Cookies. (lol)
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Wonderfull how the story unfolds, starts as a simple romance and epands but manages to stay romantic.
Well done.
And the steamy scenes were hot!!! Please write more stories.
I really enjoyed the story again .Let me say this one of your readers must have really been hurt by someone to make the comment {once a liar always a liar} Hey get over it. This story was loving giving and a second chance for Kevin and a third chance for little Rita. Sure she stalked him but only in a good way. a favorite of mine 5 stars plus
Ron Texas
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How about a follow up story on Brittany and Kevin??? Hmmmmm what do you say.
It's my second read. STILL A BEAUTIFUL STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"Kevin." I looked at her. "Christmas is a time for forgiveness, especially when the one who wronged you did so with the best of intentions."
"Yeah, the road to hell is paved with good intentions"
A liar is just that, trusting one is paramount to baring your neck for the headsman's ax.
Just saying
Morgan DeWolfe
FANTASTIC story love the second time around. Such a good moving story it was supprising caring a true love story and both had problems in there life each different each similar. I had lost the story for a while but once I found it put it in my favorites not to be lost again. 5 stars plus.
I would like to see a sequil to this story so to bring us up to date on Brittany and Kevins life.
Ron
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MY LAPTOP MESSED UP ON ME AND I LOST SME THINGS OFF OF IT AND THIS STORY WAS ONE OF THEM. I COULD NOT FOR THE LIFE OF ME REMEMBER THE NAME BUT THE STORY I DID REMEMBER BECAUSE I THOUGHT IT WAS SUCH A TOUCHING LOVING STORY THAN ALL OF A SUDDEN(MILK & COOKIES) POPPED INTO MY HEAD. IT IS BACK IN MY FAVORITES.
ALL THE LITTLE THINGS THAT SHE LET SLIP HE WAS SO INTRUGED WITH HER HE FINALLY PUT THE PUZZLE TOGETHER.
RON TEXAS
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You knocked it out of the park. Awesome story, clever plot and keen eye for details. Awesome job.
I really liked the hints but I had it figured out when she called him Mr. Collins and he had never told her his last name just Kevin. It was such a sweet and loving story and Kevin deserved someone like her/ 5 stars plus
I do hope you have a sequel about Brittany and Kevin. I really enjoyed the story it is going into my favorites.
Ron
Loved the story. Lived there 67-69 both in town and out at Cigil. Used to take the ferry across the harbor just to drink the tea. I was 12 and 13 then, sadly no girl friends.
oh yeah, i think you could sqeeze at least 2 or 3 more stories out of these two!!
...that there might be more coming!! These characters seem to have just barely gotten started (again), and much more could be done with them as the relationship develops.
I think it's strange how you write about snow on Christmas in Dallas and last year we got a ton of snow here in Dallas. Loved the story.
After reading your Bio and looking at the picture I'm sure you'll never write again because the cat is about to kill you for putting a melon on it's head!
I loved it. The story is well-written, but the plot really seals the deal.
Actually, I have only 3 I've ever "ranked" - it's now my top four. Well plotted,
well written - tho my personal taste goes to a more "complex" word and writing structure, this is great material and Mr. Gresham could learn from you.
thank you for pleasure, enough "pain" to be real - and an excellent, I'd say real, handling of aversion to dishonesty in a person. Been there, still do that probably too much, but you achieved just the right tenses and senses. Well done.
I'd shout "Encore! Encore!", but this story stands so wonderfully on its own.
A wonderful read!
by the readers by the quality of the stories listed in the Similar Stories sidebar next to the feedback area. Not only did you get a 5 from me, you have 5 of my ten top stories listed as similar.
Thank you. Well done.
Don't know how I missed this one first time around, glad I stumbled on it today though.
This was a well written, well thought out, and awesome Christmas story. I liked the twist of the first date/girlfriend thing. The whole stalking thing was a little troubling, but the way you worked in the technology and internet with facebook and all, it was well done. Thank you for sharing this with all of us.
This has to be one of the best well-written stories I've read. I seriously hope you win the contest.
Very well developed plot and well rounded main characters. I don't recall any typos, grammar errors or bad sentence structures. Either you are very good or you have a fantastic editor. I will definitely read more of your stories after the contest is over, too many others to read now. Good luck, a definite 5.
I'm a romantic fool, I guess, but I think that Kevin and Brittany, and even little Alicia, are just too good to waste. You invented such a wonderful, sweet story around these actors, and it would be a pity to bring them to life and then drop them. I know you like to write chapter after chapter, so why not do it with these nice folks? Just think where you could take them over the course of ten or twelve chapters!
for about 20 years (Roanoke/Keller to be exact). Your story took me back there -- including the year of the Super Bowl and hellacious ice storm that went with it.
Fantastic story. Thanks for the memories of my "home town" and for the wishful thinking that something like that had happened to me while I lived there.
Very good, nice plot twist,the physical parts were perfect! Well done!
This story was everything that I expected it to be from the title. And it brought out the meaning and memories of milk and cookies. I hope you win!
Loved it, amazingly written, and please for the love of god write more stories!
Great job, great story!
I felt like I was the Fly on the Wall, enjoyed every moment, every scene so again - 'Well Done'..........
Thanks!
Gordon