All Comments on 'Mirror Pt. 01'

I could not even make it through chapter one to find out how the story went it was so badly written and boring.

Yes it was horribly written, but it's interesting.

you switch between these two perspectives throughout the story so please stick with one the whole way through

Pretty adolescent. Get an editor.

Don't write anything else until you know how to write a sentence correctly.

It seems that your a new writer or just aren't very well educated. Either way, just keep trying, try to make it more interesting from the start, you'll pull in more readers that way. Also try to stick to third person or first person not and/or. You could transition once in the story between the two, but you must be experienced to know how to do so without confusing your readers.

Present tense, past tense, first person, third person all in one paragraph. Miss spellings, typos, no apostrophes in contractions, etc., etc., etc.

Premise, plot, and idea were all good. HOWEVER, the writing was too bad for me to finish reading.