by Ubiquitous101
Not too bad as a set-up for things to come. Don't let those who are not into this fetish discourage you. You write well enough, if a bit formal. As you might say to Miss Megumi: don't be afraid to cut loose!
At least it wasn't the same old tired storyline you find around here. Perhaps in the future technology will evolve so that you will be able to have a scratch and sniff thing on the screen, so that a story like this will be more fully... enjoyed by the readers. Not sure if I'll check out chapter 2 or not. Depends on what she ate that day. Can't complain, because I read it, but I won't admit to it by signing my comment.