All Comments on 'Miz Sarah Strikes Back'

Great story but why do all the authors make out their characters to be so stupid married with a daughter and knew nothing about his wife, i don't think i would want him raising a kid.

When you are in love and trust your spouse you don't think they will cheat on you! That's why the spouse is always the last to know. Had a good friend and business associate that when to Agnes Scott.

I'm so glad you were able to follow up your first story with one just as good and so quickly. It seems to me you you might be another StarStang except focusing on art instead of muscle cars as a common theme in your works. I especially liked the Miz Sarah character I'm so tired of the young hot lawyer type most writers copy, maybe there's a series of reoccurring stories in her future. Please keep it up.

WHAT STATES IN THE USA WOULD ISSUE A RESTRAINING ORDER FOR A NON VIOLENT OFFENCE, SINCE IT WAS HIS HOME AND HERS HOW CAN HE BE LOCKED OUT.THE COURT ORDER SHOULD HAVE BEEN THROWN OUT.AND HE SHOULD HAVE BEEN IN HIS HOUSE THAT DAY.. WITHOUT A MUTUAL SETTLEMENT THIS WAS ALL BULLSHIT. THE REST OF THE STORY WAS GOOD BUT A LITTLE FAIRLY TAIL IN THIS REAL WORLD

Typing in caps is akin to shouting. Don't shout, it's immature.

Further, this is a story. Get it..a story. The author can darn well make up any fantasy of law the author desires. Get it? Story is fine!

Restraining orders are often given out on a temporary basis until a full hearing is scheduled. It is first come first served with the temporary order.

One of the best stories recently posted. Thanks for the entertainment.

Something great happens this is one of those times what a GREAT STORY!!!!! Thanks for sharing.

Best character I've seen here. She reads like a cross between Miss Marple and Matlock. The third person viewpoint is a very clever idea. I smell a series. Looking forward to another serving of Miz Sarah.

One picayune matter: tighten up the editing process a bit.

story - an enjoyable read!!!

I gave it 5 but i did want to say Watch you char. names. you switch a couple of times...

Good to see a real STORY that ends great

THAT SHOWS NO ENDING. MISS MARPLE AND SHERLOCK HOLMES ARE STILL GOING STRONG. I SEE NO REASON FOR MIZ SARAH NOT TO DO AS WELL, OR BETTER, AND HAVE A LONG SUCCESSFUL TENURE. THE AUTHOR HAS A SURE WINNER AND/IF HIS EGO STAYS INTACT THIS COULD BE A SUPER HIT WITH MULTIPLE STORIES. TK U MLJ LV NV

Good development, lots of twists for the length of the story, good character development. I'd like to see this become a chapter in a book

is a "Fairly Tail"? THE REST OF THE STORY WAS GOOD BUT A LITTLE FAIRLY TAIL IN THIS REAL WORLD. Any resemblence to a "Fairy Tale"?

And what a marvelous character in Miz Sarah. Since they were in Atlanta I wonder if her office decor was provided by Sugarbakers? I'm sure she and Julia would have got along famously. Well done all around.

This story was unnecessarily long with a lot of unnecessary material. Spending time to edit will help with story flow and help with scoring.

Are There going to be more Miz Sarah stories?

This author has egregiously and willfully transcended the trite and hackneyed cliches that I hold so precious in the Loving Wife genre. I wanted to jettison a couple thimblefulls of spooey but was the blood coursing thrum veins was maliciously diverted by this Macumber person into the cerebral reigon. Clearly this scribe has no regard for stereotypes. Next time could he throw me a bone and let slip that miz Sarah has ginormous hooters and a letch for meth and chipendale dancers hopped up on meth and red bull. Five StArs but awarded under duress as. I had a Hemmingway thing back on the day before I discovered Bukowski and Filipino bar girls

Just loads of fun. A wonderful gentle pace that was so endearing. Me and my iPad thank you FrancisMacomber...for Driving Miz Sarah here!

Excellent story. 5 stars!

I have no complaints at all. This story was very well done. Great entertainment.

I liked the story, but found a few inconsistencies that seemed manipulated to make the story more dramatic.

Lola asks for the house and its entire contents, giving the sole reason that she made more money than him. Then, her lawyer mentions the state being a "no fault" state.

That would mean that barring egregious circumstances on his part, all property would be split 50/50. Since the wife cited no behavior or circumstances to warrant a different settlement, the initial settlement proposal makes no sense. Further, trying to use a child to coerce a different settlement would be viewed quite badly by a judge. Even if the husband agreed to the settlement, it would be reviewed by a judge, and he would ask why the settlement was so unfair, and would quickly surmise why when no reasonable explanation was offered. No lawyer in his right mind would take this to court out of concern for his future law license when the judge realized what he was a party to...

I know this seems a bit picky, bit such inconsistencies tend to stick in my mind when reading a story.

a well constructed story that held my attention to the end loved it

5 stars

I really enjoyed this story. Miz Sarah is a wonderful character. I haven't read any of your other stories yet but maybe you could craft other stories around her.

What a nice present this new author has given us. We certainly hope that much more will be posted in the future.

Nice one - More please!

and I enjoyed both very much. They are exceptionally well done. Thank you for sharing your time, energy and talent with us. Like so many others I expect, I'm looking forward to more.

And how, exactly, was this erotic?

Miz Sarah is vivid and interesting character/narrator.

Well written, amusing, charming and "lotsa other good stuff"!

Miz Sarah reminded me of sitting on a double swing on the veranda in the heat enjoying a pre dinner sherry. Wonderful story and character. I would love to see more of her. 5 stars.

liked the story. thanks!

Thoroughly enjoyed the story even though it was fairly predictable. Having been born and raised in the South, I appreciated the southern aristocratic

genre. It is worth the 5 I gave it.

I love Sarah Cannon and her Southern gentile charm and her wicked sense of humor. I'd love to read about more of her clients and the selfish, greedy, not so bright people that want to divorce them.

You have developed an excellent character in Miz Sarah. Hope to see many more of her cases covered on Lit. Well done and humorous.

from an old southern romantic. Well written and an excellent plot. Maybe well used, but still a very good story.

well done . truly good ole boy system that exist in the carolinas and ga great story .

And that's entertainment!

You got the restraining order right: There is no "too stupid to continue" rule in U.S. courts. Given the right lawyer and the right judge you can have any temporary order issued for any concoted reason without any investigation other than an allegation that can be used as justification. Some will argue with me, but I have practical experience.

I read this after reading your latest submission: "Miz Sarah Wins One, Loses Another", and I have to say both kept me glued to my chair. Very well done.

BTW, I liked the bit about the knitting, which of course, immediately brought Miss Marple to mind.

I seldom allow 5 stars, but in the case of both of the Miz Sarah stories, you've received my top vote.

Thanks for a great read.

Harry

My dear sir, I must confess my undiluted delight regarding the reading of your stories. You have struck a chord that resonates with gentility, the appreciation of simple courtesies (sweet tea and sugar cookies aside), and least we forget to note - fine writing.

While the closest I can come to proclaiming my "Southern-ness" is that I am a fourth generation Southern Californian, perhaps my geographical lack of proper upbringing is balanced (hopefully) by the high esteem in which I hold your character - Miz Sarah.

I look forward in anticipation of your future submissions.

Yours truly.

Excepting only two changes of names, Emily where Sarah and vice versa should have gone for story continuity, this is the best story on Literotica I have read. Period!

wkwimp@yahoo.com

Well written, well constructed, well laid out and well told.

Very nice!

Fun, and entertaining read. totally worth the time.

I love it when a female Perry Mason comes along with a hint of the south twang. 5 stars

I'm not going to nitpick about the legal side of the story since I know nothing about American Law, what I'll do nitpick is the character. Good God, I've never read a character like Miz Sarah. I take it that she is an embodiment of Southern Belle? Very strong and very interesting character. I'm glad that she have a series. 5 star from me.

J [drazvich(at)live(dot)com]

to read something so beautifully rounded. A rare delight.

Here I was reading erotic stories. And I started reading this one. On the first page I only waited for the juicy parts. But then I got caught up in the story and enjoyed it very much. Very well written and I enjoyed every minute I spent reading it.

Thank you very much Francis

/Rikard

But really not that good. The story was very predictable; by halfway through I knew exactly how it would end (although I was hoping for some unexpected twists that never came). There was really no plot to speak of; the incriminating photographs were too convenient to be believable. Pulling out such photographs and successfully using them, as a writer's tool, is comparable to pulling out a magic wand, or drug that permits mind control. It was really just a very lazy tactic on the part of the author. There was little real character development, either, and no eroticism. The lady lawyer was even less moral than the other lawyers, resorting to blackmail. This is, at most, a 3 star story.

Absolutely delightful. Kinda like "Miss Marple becomes a lawyer in Atlanta". Keep 'em comin'!

Yeah, okay, a trifle wordy and affected at times; but this was crackerjack writing.

Y'all 'scuse me while I go read the other Miz Sarah stories...

If not, you're depriving the world of your talent.

I am sure this pompous ass is somehow manipulating his ratings. Most of his mind excrement is worth 2-3 stars. I will contact webmaster to inquire how is it possible.

Well, I have read most of your stories the last few days and conclude you are one of my favorite writers. Your tales are very entertaining and very well told. Keep up the good work.

Ron Wood - Old Marine Vet

It was set in "Old Atlanta" which does still exist - it was priceless

Nice job and very relatable in an Agatha Christy sort of way heh

Miz Sarah is a franchise player! 'Nuff said!

No surprises, just common rabbits-out-of-hats magic!

(and some sweet tea.)

5*

So far I enjoy these Miz Sarah stories. They've got a nice kind of feel to them. Sort of like, "Murder, She Wrote". Which, I'm sure, is intended.

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I look forward to reading more in this series. The quality of the details made this story a delightful read - like a real mystery tale.

Good read. Well written. Nice piece.

A well written intriguing story.

George in Omaha

I like the Sarah Cannon character and hope to read more of her in the future.

I have come to expect such results from FM. Interesting to tell the cheating slut story from the aggrieved husband's attorney's POV. I'll now read add'l Miz Sarah stories.

I enjoyed this very much. Another selfish wife who sells out for power and money. I likes Miz Sarah's homespun approach. Now I'll read the second in the series.

The DJ

EXCELLENT story, in my opinion. Five***** stars !

You've definitely found a winner with the Miz Sara series. My only question is, have you had a little female help in writing these stories? If you have, it wouldn't surprise me in the least. If you haven't, then you're a better writer than I thought. Congratulations on the series.

To the writer of the anonymous comment made on 3/4/12 I refer to Benjamin Franklin and say " it's better to keep your mouth closed and have people think you a fool, than to open it and remove all doubt".

"But when a wife suddenly seeks a divorce, there's usually a good reason. And when she feels she has to seek a restraining order, that's a bad sign." – Or maybe she’s a cheating, vindictive bitch! Especially when she restrains him from their child as well!

Given the “disparity in their incomes”, why does he have to pay anything?

I'm glad they ultimately won, but couldn't she have gone before a judge and got the restraining order, at least for the daughter, lifted sooner?

Still love it. Still five stars. Still a favorite. This is an awesome series. You do crime drama best. This is by far the best series in this site.

It would make much more sense if it was Emily that blushed rather than Sarah on the last page.

Love it when jackasses get hoisted on their own petard.

I don't have anything of significance to add, but you have written a master piece. All the elements of a great story are present, and it has the happiest of endings.

This is a well written and tightly composed story. The use of genteel manners from the south is a very nice touch. Personally, I would have loved to have seen Lola get more of what she really truly deserves, but that is a matter of personal taste and not a comment on the story itself.

What a fun story! You did just a great job. I struggled to stay with it as I was so anxious to see what happened but I’m really glad I did. You did such a masterful job foreshadowing without giving it all away that it increased my anxiousness to see what happened. Very nice job and thank you so much for sharing your work.

... and done masterfully.

5-stars

Probably unrealistic, with the janitor conveniently being able to get all the pictures, and Stephen conveniently being able to take off day after day to put his head together with Miz Sarah's cute and conveniently available assistant.

BUT, it sure was a delectable tale!

Some complained that the ending fell together too predictably, but it made a lot more sense than many of the non sequitur endings that famed mystery writer Agatha Christie pulled out of her hat.

I saw several Miz Sarah listings on FrancisMacomber's Submissions page, and selected the one with the earliest date. Good choice! Now, on to the next one chronologically.

Paul in Oklahoma

5*

As said by others.

My new favorite Miz Sara story. This would make a great TV anthology. I don’t know why I haven’t read these stories before. I think the one about cuckolds and cornbread scared me away.

You just got to love it when a story like this comes together...I loved how Miz Sarah put two and two together...but with all that was great about this story the ending was a little bit of a let down...again...the plot is about what Lola was willing to do to her husband...she was cheating on him and using her talents to get ahead in this big wide world...so her greed was the story here...and we don't get to find out what she felt when it was all brought out on the talbe...so what did she feel when she was caught... I guess the author forgot to tell us.............

I do like the character and the story. It's a very competent reworking of the older lady with a mind like a steel trap and incredible insight into the motivations of people.

I STILL think they could have gotten the bogus restraining order lifted sooner, at least as regards their daughter. He's served divorce papers, goes to his house only to find that he's locked out and can't see his daughter. His "running amok" is completely understandable, and certainly not grounds to restrain him from his daughter.

FrancisMacomber is a good writer, but this story is set-up beyond any credibility. Also author does not really know his law. There is nothing here that could have caused an indictment, and not even a civil suit, as there was no actual damage.

I virtually grew up in Atlanta and love Miz Sarah’s stories!

Great, entreating fun story. average people(cleaners) doing above average things

Some are pointing out the similarity to Miss Marples but where is ole Barnie Fife (spelling?) This sounds like a program with him in it. Not to say that I don't like the story because I do, I do - 5 stars worth!

Game, set and match.

A nice story. And while the injustices noted here are for real , in real life, the resolution here is not at all common and very unlikely. Not only that,but the greed coverup avoided penalties for felonies, did no justice to the art agent and covered over man you other indiscretions. What about the idiot judge that agreed to a false restraint order request, and the lawyer that presented it. In the real world, men still get raped In court, have no standing in child custody, and are consistently deprived of any representation of fairness. Consider the default in nearly all courts is to give the mother custody. So she spends zero dollars to receive favorable judgement. If the man wants custody, he must pony op thousands of dollars in additional legal fees, and still hope to get a reasonable judge. Is it any wonder women are complaint that men will not commit. It Is in their best interests not todo so.

Once again she is just satisfied with a win for he r client,instead of reporting Willingham to the law society ethics committee.Also where did Emily appear from?.

A delightful series. Looking forward to all of them

This is gonna be a great series to read. Thank-you

This is gonna be a great series to read. Thank-you

When she started knitting in the opposing lawyer's office, I laughed heartily. It is like Murder She Wrote of Loving Wives and divorce court. Lol

Unique perspective. Interesting read.

Super fabulous!

Would make a good movie.

27 April 2023

What an enjoyable romp of a story!

I was grinning like the village idiot as I read.

I have to agree with brian_scooby (below). If this tale is a faithful sign of things to come, this is going to be a fun series.

Counsel in civil litigation cannot use a threat of criminal action to induce a settlement. The threat made was a serious ethical violation, worthy of disbarment. It was an amusingly written fantasy, but that gaffe, and many other ethical violations by the sweet little knitting lawyer, made the story a lay person's absurdist nattering.

So, Bobar, as an officer of the court, Miz Sarah would’ve been bound to turn the evidence of fraud over to the DA, the whore would’ve been send to prison, and the same outcome would’ve been obtained. I might’ve gone that way and it probably would’ve made just as good of a story. Have the whore arrested in the law office and then pressed the fee with the pictures as an afterword.

I’m positive no lawyer has EVER been guilty of an “ethical violation”. (Sic)

More Miz Sarah stories. Please

Gaffes or otherwise, still a likeable story! Thank you!

5 stars from Xluckylee for my first Mz Sarah story, and now for my next .