All Comments on 'Mothers and Daughters Pt. 03'

I can't talk to the title of this story or the sex described in it, for there is not much of either. It doesn't matter. In the end I found this just about as interesting as most novels that I choose, so I would keep on reading through page 600 if it existed.

Nice work.

Or as we say down South - everything into the pot. You sure threw a lot of garbage into this trainwreck. And it didn't come out well at all. Nothing sexy or erotic about it. In fact, it was just kinda nasty.

Thanks for your candid feedback. As you can see, I do not try to write all things for all people (one comment likes it, one comment doesn't). I try to write an interesting story, and weave some hot sex in now and then, instead of just writing about sex.

Deltablonde.

I liked this story a lot. The erotic parts are well written and the other parts are - well - just pretty good.

I don't get what people throw in all this non-constructive criticism for. It's a great story and actually some of us prefer longer stories that have a well thought out plot and not just one one page "story" of a sex scene. Really the only criticism I can come up with (aside from I wish the main character acted a little differently... but THAT is definitely personal preference and not a failing of the story at all... he's his own fictitious person) is that sometimes if there's a misspelling in a certain place that confuses the reader it can kinda damage the immersion. But all around great story, keep up the good work.

Once, when much younger, I was working under the rear of my car. I had a CB antenna hooked to the trunk which let loose and fell between my legs... It wasn't swung, it just fell.

But it hit just right. I couldn't have stood for minutes if my life depended on it.

A kick to the balls like you describe...? Likely he'd have been out of it at the least... Assuming he took no serious damage. Not just a "Just give me a minute and I'll be better."

But I'm liking the stories so far so that's not a major issue.

better, this ch. more interesting.