All Comments on 'Mother's Helper Ch. 05-08'

yo man i just love the story it so DAMN hott cant wait for more

Looking forward to the next chapter. Well written for the most part..:) Be carefull not to get in a rush, be slow and deliberate.

He is still being a little too timid with her, he needs to show her that she is a slut for his sexual pleasure. No amount of resistance on her part will prevent him from his owning her. She belongs to him for what ever he wants from her. He needs to get to the point of fucking her soon, using her ass pussy and mouth as a place to empty his cum, that's what cum dumps are for, and he needs to explain to her what her new position in life is now. Thanks for the story........Rich

I'm really liking this. Keep the pace you've set, it's just right. As long as you don't bring in a horse, the local basketball team or start nailing her to fences, you'll be alright. The one thing most people screw up when writing erotica is the believability factor and so far, you're money.

I really like the scene in the chaise. It would however been improved if she had taken it in the ass.

He tried to pull them up, but her legs were spread too widely, so he pulled them off and <<laid them on the night table>>.

He hurried down to the kitchen for an ice pack, water and some painkillers. The ice pack was the kind with straps. Back in his room, she was still unconscious, her beautiful legs akimbo. <<The panties dangled around one ankle.>>

'nuff said.

Matt can dream up ways to excite his mother while abusing her. She is having a sex life she could only dream of. This is one hot tale.

A good scenario reasonably well written unfortunately spoiled by some very basic continuity errors, and a few typographical mishaps.