All Comments on 'Moving in with Daddy'

Try and get an editor before posting the next chapter.

Great first part. I can't wait to read the next part. Don't pay too much attention to the grammar police.

Definitely a good start. Part 2 should be hot or hotter.

For your first submission, I think you did a really nice job. I agree that a chapter 2 would be nice. I wish you the best of luck in your writing career. I know I'll be watching for your name.

brilliant first story love it. such a real turn on.

now there must be even more parts to write about so go for it.

make my day. awesome writing.

A bit straight forward for a woman writer. Don't mind the gutter talk, like it in fact. But most women writers have more tease in their stories. How old were you when you began wanting your daddys cock? Did he show it to his baby girl when she was young? Or did you peek at your daddy when he peed or showered? Maybe you watched your parents fucking and wanted to be just like your mommy, fucked by that big dick.

"How did she know I was here? I was almost asleep ..."

"He knew it was wrong, but he would do anything ..."

Why do you chop and change between third person - 'he' - and first person - 'I', when writing the male perspective? The two examples are even within the same paragraph, right at the start of "Chapter 4"!

Twisted but very hot!

Great first story. Few mistakes, but it is so hot it doesn't matter. Nice work.

You've got talent! Liked the set-up of the divorce and Jerry (characters of future tales). I've enjoyed stories told from both party's point of view before. It gives the reader the opportunity to really become immersed into the story/fantasy. Brilliant!!

We sure need more from you little girl. This old man is waiting for your next submission

Keep the stories and me cumming!!!

Highly turned on right now

Best line: "Daddy, shut up and fuck me!" I almost came just from that...

Yes please continue this story.

You should continue with her getting pregnant after more sex.

Please. Continue this

This was sweet and lovely... please write more...

Next time can you say whose pov it is cause it confused me greatly.

For ex.

*Daddy's POV*

"Writing"

*Samantha's POV*

"More writing"

It just helps out the readers

Thanks for the consideration

More chapters soon I hope. Wish I wereher

It's a shame you never continued this story. So many office here take the Safe way and make the stepdad the object of the daughter's affection. You were brave enough to be real. Just remember it's never too late to revisit this