by Susan2002
is it weird that you when you started talking about the smells I pulled a face? ... This is going to be interesting I think
YOU are one of the most talented writers I have ever read. Your details and the flow of events actually made me cum without even touching myself. I can not wait to read more. Please read some of my stories and give me your honest opinion.
Thank you so much!
Patrick
I really enjoyed the story. The innocence of the two teens was clearly evident as was the strong bond between them. I am on to Chapter 2. Keep writing. I was wet and tingly as i read this. Well done.
Great writing, perfect pacing and buildup... for me at least.... my cock is all built up right now. I just read all the comments above. Pretty funny to see all the typos and misspellings...maybe all the commenters were all hot and bothered too...couldn't spell as the blood left their brains moving south.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story. Now on to chapter 2 and the other chapters.
...love the 'nuase' and mistique to what developes....!
What an erotic and exciting tale. I love the way you describe your experiences, makes me feel like I'm a participant and that's very sexy and exciting feeling :)
Extremely well written. It had the feel of being written from actual experience which heightened my interest an d arousal. Thank you.
You have a wonderful writing style, and I loved the way you described and captured the smell of the sex. Overall a very good rendering of a very innocent yet erotic situation ... One I wish I had experienced! Oh, there was a cousin ....
I envy them this start of their sexual life. Every boy should have a loving sister or mother, or aunt or mature woman to teach. Sexual initiation should be taught at scholl be at hot teacher
Love the story
This wasa very good story that was well written. I loved the portrayal of innocence by both siblings. Keep writing.
Wonderful story flow and description. Don't worry about the nay sayers, I checked and none of them have written the first story. I love reading/hearing about women's "first time" experiences whether it is about petting, intercourse, or maybe a bi experience.
As said before, it was easy to visualise your writing. I also got an erection from how detailed you are.
CarlusMagnus told me about your story. The first chapter gave me a bit of a stiffie. I could easily visualize what you wrote. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
This beginning is one of the best I've read on Lit.
I can hardly wait to see what these twins get themselves up to together. (Even though I have a pretty good suspicion...)
I liked it.-It is truly erotic and not a porno.see the selection of words and the natural flow of the story.
Most girls experience puberty starting around age 8. Girls breasts start developing at that age.... but not all girls' breast STOP growing at age 18. Many women I've met, have had their breasts continue to grow well past 18, sometimes into their 50's. Not ALWAYs because of puberty..but becuase of other bodily changes associated with weight gain, pregnancy, and monthly hormonal changes. It's conceivable that her breasts could be "Budding" at 18... simply meant, they were still small and hope was that they would grow even larger.... or the writer meant it in retrospect... as in when he wrote this, he was thinking back to a time (at age 18) when they weren't as large as they are TODAY.
The answer to the comment headed "Think before posting" is that stories have to feature 18-year-olds to be legal, but each reader can substitute what he/she thinks is a more plausible age of the participants. In the second chapter, the writer says that some observers thought they were too young to be in a relationship, which is another hint that they were significantly younger than 18.
I think this contribution handles the subject exceptionally well.
i wish the writers here had some brains you say she had budding breasts. agirls breasts start budding around 10-12 years old and almost if not totally fully developed by 18 this needs a total rewrite using a good editor.
DBRS
I see this is the first of a series of chapters. Based on the heat these twins have for each other, I'm thinking the remaining chapters are going to be hotter, because they've only discovered sex at this point. Looking forward to reading the remaining chapters.
Enjoyed the intimate sensuality of this piece Susan. Looking forward to reading the others.
MF
I think all of your contributions are outstanding, tantalizing, well written and sexually exciting in a most welcoming style. I just wish you were more prolific in your contributions. Thanks for making dull days bright.
susan i love your storys and your thread on pussies too im a older guy married for 41 yrs never did any incest but if the chance was offered i sure wuold have. i think that sex is the most wonderful thing two people can do .you have had a fun life wish i was your bro. but thanks to your storys it almost(almost as good as being your bro.) well in my mind i am there thanks to you .thanks tramp
wonderful opening and introduction of characters. as one other has commented, this happens much more than what most think. i especially appreciate the tenderness with which this author handles this touchy subject. my sister, ten months older, was the focus throughout my teenage years. today that infatuation has grown into much, much more. i can't imagine life without her.
I realy enjoyed your story. I had such an opportunity, and I will never forget the thrill, and the enjoyment for both of us. I would like to read additional chapters of this encounter. Thank you for your story
I loved this story, the whole idea was excellent! I can't wait to read the next chapters you have!!
Sexual discovery in the arms of a relative isn't as unusual as most would think. My awakening came quite accidently while wrestling with my sweet little cousin. One minute we were beating the crap out of one another and the next minute...? We were breathing like we had run a marathon, and it wasn't from the figorous excersize. I grabbed for an arm and got her boob, and then she deliberately grabbed my nuts. The rest...shall we says is wonderful history...Sounds as if Jen and her bro had much the same experience. We should all be so lucky...Nice sweet beginning.
You are an excellent writer! Loved all of your submissions, especially the 4 part Nurse story. The situations and pacing of your stories are perfect. Hope to see more from you in the future.
Like the others I am hoping that you continue the story and help his sister find release as well. I would hope you let the relationship take its natural course
I hope this is a serial. After all, she hasn't gotten off yet!
Great start to what could be a several parter if you want it to be...Your words painted a vivid picture ...Ed
Nice story...is this your first incest story? I'm intersested in seeing where you take the relationship.