All Comments on 'My Housemate's Girlfriend Ch. 01'

Love your work. There is indeed something magical about hearing a girl pee. Even better to see it. Look forward to more!

Light tone, conversational, not too far out to be unbelievable, characters felt realistic ... Until she spoke after giving him her panties. It was completely outside the scene and her established character. She suddenly talked like a porn fantasy. One sentence. Such a precarious balance the writer walks with the reader.

Good first submission, though. -hell good submission overall. That one line of dialogue didn't diminish a good piece of storytelling. Keep it up! And thanks for posting!

This story is even hotter than her pee! Looking forward to a second part.

someone should finish this story

Hoping you're still out there somewhere and will write a couple more parts to this series

This was a great story. As a guy with a pee fetish, I love the idea of this story. I would love to see what happens as things progress.