All Comments on 'My Marriage Mistake'

A lot going on, but ended in a good place. Another good one from DG, who has a lot of them.

Just what you'd expect from two-faced fucks... aka your typical Democrat hypocrites.

It's a damned good story..... PERIOD. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

(p.s. I wanted to fuck his sisters.)

The author would never believe this but this story is a good outline of my life.

Why the need to inject politics into your comment Anon 04/21/20?

Great story DG thanks!

by Anonymous

04/21/20

Compliment the Author's story and then list all the faults in it.

Just what you'd expect from two-faced fucks... aka your typical Democrat hypocrites.

It's a damned good story..... PERIOD. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

(p.s. I wanted to fuck his sisters.)

The author would never believe this but this story is a good outline of my life.

The check he gave her on their wedding night makes her a high paid prostitute. Her own credit card with a half million dollar credit line would have been more appropo. He did seem to enjoy throwing his money around. And he either knew or suspected that his head of security had Ross and Woody killed. I have no problem with that.

I really liked it a lot . As far as the political ramifications, IT's all bullshit. The guy has a heart of gold. If rewarding good people, and helping the downtrodden makes him a " Democratic whatever, " so what . The politically correct should keep their mouths shut. Keep writing ,buddy, and maybe Barry will pay the jerks a visit. 7and 1/2 stars from the Bears private account. The Bear approves. Grow up people .

The BEAR

...too much about money. Don't get me wrong - that's the character and he is interesting. I just think that as characters go, it's a personality flaw that makes me think less of him. Then again, it seems appropriate to his nature and business. It's still a good story.

LOVED IT!

What an excellent story with a great ending...loved it!! 5*

Soft touch.He gives the slut three hundred thousand dollars and jobs to relatives,who never offered any help to his family whilst they struggled as he grew up.How did he get to achieve what he did?

Excellent

What a great tale. Warms my heart. There are some good people in the world.

Five Stars

Very good read.

I think this DG Hear is one good writer as I have read some of his stories.

Thanks DG Hear.

Nothing beats the older LW stories from the great writers like DG Hear. A few of the newer ones are in this class, but not very many.

Excellent story, well written with great characters. Well done 5 stars

Just love it when true love takes over Thank you Mr hear (jaybee186)

Lovely story about a guy who marries the wrong woman but finds the right woman later in life and they thrive together. Very heart-warming tale about someone who chooses wrong but recovers to make the right choice in the end. I gave the story 5 stars.

Excellent

Don't always love your stories, but this is definitely a 5.

What does his name being well-known have to do with her taking his name? Why is he surprised that she doesn't mind? Many women keep their maiden names.

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As you said, 'I'm not worth a half million dollars,'" - If Shelby's also fucking, then June won't cost $500,000.

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"The video was on, but there is no sound to these units. It made them a much quieter unit and less detectable." - Cameras don't make any more noise (if any at all) if they also record sound.

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I was wondering why he wouldn't sleep with June even though he knew that Shelby was sleeping with Chuck, then realized that he didn't want June to think that she only got the job for sleeping with him.

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If Shelby was gone, why did he leave her check on the counter?

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It shouldn't have been too hard to get ahold of June, she DOES work for him!

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It was worded poorly, but I assume the $100,000 was in the briefcase, and it was payment for the hits.

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Her ex was stupid. As Lickideesplit said, he should have waited until Randy and June were married, then she WOULD be rich.

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@Anonymous Re: Pre-nup - Without the prenup she could get much more than $5 million. As for the $500,000, it was a wedding present, they were already married, so it had nothing to do with whether she change her mind about marrying him. In any case, it was symbolic: If the plot worked, it would have cost him $500,000 to be with her, he's telling her that it would have been worth it.

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@Anonymous Re: Ahem - He went back and forth, First it was one brother and twin sisters, then one sister and two brothers, I don't remember if they were twins or not, then back to one brother and two sisters, again I don't remember if they were twins or not.

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@HighlandLaddie and Anonymous, of course Bruce was the cause of the deaths, that's what the $100,000 and gold card were for. Anonymous, since it was his gun, it's highly likely that it was the ex, though for the reasons given above it's possible that Chuck did it for revenge.

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@timriv, we don't know what was in the briefcase, though it's likely it was the 100K, the sentence was worded poorly. But he also gave him one of his gold cards. They're like "Get Out Of Jail Free" cards, if Bruce ever needs ANYTHING, he only needs to ask.

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@Anonymous Re: "The ending was crap" - The killers weren't killed "immediately." The cops said they turned up yesterday. He was in a coma for 7-9 days, and I think he was awake for a day or two before the cops spoke to him.

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@Anonymous Re: "I Loved The Story Until..." - They're married, she has access to ALL of his money, as noted above the check is symbolic of what he would have had to pay Shelby if the plan had worked, i.e. to have her would have been worth at least $500K.

Well that was a helluva lot of fun. Who doesn't want to be Prince Charming to Cinderella?

MC owned fifty percent of some businesses but didn't own the businesses but had control of them? WTF? Do you not know an accountant, lawyer or business owner to aks for help? You control a business when you own MORE than fifty percent. When you own fifty percent, you DO own a business only half of it though.

Married her? Yeah I've seen men do dumber things. 🤣

Page 3

A defensive linebacker? What is that? A linebacker who can't take a joke? There is no offensive linebacker. Linebackers are defense by definition.

End of page 3-When you have been in a bar scrap, be VERY alert when you leave and have a weapon.

More of a death bed confession? It's not often a line makes me bust out laughing. Well done.

If he's promising her five million if they break up, he's a lot more than millionaire. Millionaire isn't really a big deal anymore.

schwanze - you assume too much, how many people own the other 50 percent? Have you ever heard of stocks?

I get that the guy talked about money a lot but have known too many people like that. When something is a big part of your life it becomes everything. Many times it is someone who was forced to grow up fast and help the family.

I loved the weaving of the plot in this story line. Yes, there are weaknesses but overall it was excellent , hence my 5*.

By he way, is the name BErry or BArry?

BJ

Damn, you write great stories.

good plot but a little simple

Great story. Good read. Thanks for writing it. LP

Very good story but Barry was a recklessly generous man, wasn't he? Why reward the wife? And what did June's ex expect to gain by shooting Barry? Some big gaps / logic leaps here!

"Most people would probably think I'm nuts for giving her anything but I wanted her to try and turn her life around."

Yes, this was just stupid, completely non-credible virtue signaling that detracted from the plot...but the rest was fun...so...5

It's like you put a jetpack on your back and launched yourself out of the puddle of shit some of your other stories are.

This is really great work! Congrats!

I loved it. What a great story, and very well written. Unfortunately last night I only made it to about mid page 3 (before going to bed), but today I restarted at page 3 and finished the story. It held my attention all the way thru. Part of me was looking for a part 2 (to find out if Randy and June had a child together), but you really covered it well.

I gave it 5 stars. Thank You for sharing it with us.

26thNC

26thNCabout 1 year ago

Nothing beats the older LW stories from the great writers like DG Hear. A few of the newer ones are in this class, but not very many.

I have to agree 100%, as this IS the kind of story I look for in the LW forum, and not the "cuckold" stories written and posted day after day (shouldn't those be in the Fetish forum?). It's gotten to the point that I'd rather read non consent or group stories, as they're more believable than the "standard cheating wives/cuckold stories" that follow a standard format that's been laid out by many writers.

To Anonymous, before you criticise ‘big gaps’ and ‘logic leaps’ it would be good if you got the characters right, the main character is RANDY and BARRY is Junes son.

He was way over generous. Why give his first "wife" anything? I assume his security guy did the business for him? Other than that a really good story.

Very entertaining. Nice work. 5 stars

Although the ending was just a little bit rushed, overall this story gets 5 stars for a happy ending for a really good, self-made man.

No wonder this man was shot. He's an idiot who keeps picking up strays and is surprised they're full of filth

You said "Thank you for reading my story.", I sa back, thank you for writing it. It is well-written and thoroughly uplifting! Excellent job!

I thought this guy was supposed to be a smart business man?

This was great. I really enjoyed this book. It was certainly a pleasure to read.

Bryan Phillips

Sorry I had to stop reading, it just became silly nonsense after awhile, which is a shame coz this author CAN write.⭐️