by DG Hear
I never know what to expect with your stories. This was another classic DG Hear story. Always glad to see a story posted by you.
An Avid reader and fan
This is the type of DG story that I look forward to. I await your next submission.
Bravo !! simply fabulous... there were a few story twists that stretched the credibility a bit but not too much.
The check at the end for $500,000 was a REALLY really nice trouch...
that one got me-- but good.
there not much to say,good story and keep them coming.
DG,
This is the kind of story I wait for and you have yet to disapoint me. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
This has to be one of the best stories ever written on this site. Thank You So Much
Nice story, DG. I enjoyed reading it. Sometimes life does turn out ok, thank goodness.
It was a wonderful story and well written. The author did a very good job all except for the ending. If he really loved her, he would not have left a check for her. It sounds too much like leaving money for a whore. He should have taken her and her family shopping and let them get what they wanted to with a maximum of $500,000.
I don't think she was crying for joy over this, but crying for the love that she had given to the man and the way he was treating her. He needs to grow up and get worldly.
Damn fine story, never left a comment before, but this is one worth leaving one.
Excellent story from an author who writes fine stories. I especially liked the part where the attackers turned up dead! I like detective stories and just deserts coming to those who deserve them.
Please continue to write for this site.
Roger
Just another one of your great stories. The resulting grade figures says it all on how I feel.
Another fine example of your creative skills with a real ending. Thanks!!!
We expect great stuff from you and you keep delivering!
This was quite nicely done with a good ending.
Liked it lots!
Regards, DJ
Well all these accolades for just another romance by DG. Give me a break he’s done this all before, so what’s new? I mean you expect all this pumping up for DG and yet he is just human.
But dang it, DG is so consistent as not laying down and relaxing but putting out what hits him as a fantasy story.
DG is expected to “do good”, but it’s always appreciated and he has to live with the burden of his own talent. Oh heck, it was dang good and such well-done entertainment.
Thank you DG for the great entertainment and the emotional ripping of the heartstrings.
PT
The benevolent Mr. Randy was so amazing, I just feel jealous of the characters that had the good luck to be around him (except for his enemies of course). It also means that this author knows HOW TO NOT RUSH in his narrative. He knows how to plan the plot so that there is enough “juice” left to draw us in even as the story comes to it’s last home stretch.
He knows how to build characters as well, and even though it was not a ‘humorous story’, there was humor in it, which I always admire. I know I have not said anything new about this talented author, but IT'S STILL TRUE! And I still wish I could get one of those golden trimmed cards…did I mention humor in the story?
And a really great read.
As generous as he was it's a wonder he could have any money left.
Someone saw the half million check as leaving it for a whore. And you might think that had he not left the note with it. You don't usually leave notes for whores; just the money. And I doubt she would take it as any other way than lovingly.
It's hard to imagine any wealthy person acting like Randy. They tend to be the major crooks on the scene rather than mr honesty. Randy is thoroughly likable. He has good morals and expects them in others and feels they should be rewarded if they do!!
Thanks for the good story.
I love a good story and this is one. Made me cry made me laugh and kept me interested till the end even if the end was predictable. Nice work DG
Fallen Angel
your stories are always good, whoch brings this question to mind, do you write ant bad ones?
keep up the great work
I love a good story and this is a great one. You kept me interested till the end despite the length. Nice work DG! Randy is a thoroughly likable hero and generous to a fault. He is lucky to have enough money available for all his worthy causes. Another DG Hear 'happy ending' although Chuck Woody and J. Arthur Ross might not have agreed with this. DG, you never fail to hit the mark, well done! Pete.
It is not what you have, it is what you do with what you have that counts! Once again you have weaved a delightful story displaying the human spirit in its most trying situation -martial distress. Thanks for the excellent read!
SleeplessinMD
DG i loved everything about this story The coma was so moving and theatrical I hope you write more stories that moving and sad.DG I have always been a reader of your stories and i love them still.
Pat M.
Atlanta,Ga
So warm and fuzzy, this story was a lot of fun. There were a lot of places where you could have expanded, and others where you didn't need to mention the obvious, but it was such a cool little story, I had to give you full marks.
The story may have been a little corny , but maybe it's a sign of my age. because I thought it was a wonderful heartwarming read. Thank D G your stories are consistently high quality and entertaining.
60 year old George
This story is in the style of D. H. Hear. It is, in short, a wonderful read that which when you start reading it you can't stop until you've finished. Thank you D.G. RAG
A good, old-fashioned story with a fairy tale ending, with just enough edge to it to keep it from being sappy.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading it!
Such a sweet story! This was a better quality read then I expected to find on literotica.
Lots of action and transitions so that nothing got stale.
Good work DG, and thanks for the dough.
Bruce!
D. G., Ruth was certainly not too old; you should have given them a couple of kids of their own to close out the story!!!
Call me a hopeless romantic if you will, I still love it when the nice guy wins. Good read. Sequel?
Some people just want something for nothing, regardless of whether they deserve it or not. What a pig he is!
DGH,
Still one of your best stories!
thanks for sharing on Lit.
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I've read about 20 of your stories so far and not a bad 1 yet.
This is the third or fourth time I've read this one and it gets better than the time before. My compliments to a very good writer. R.T.
Some things I didn't like but nevertheless I rated it 5*****s.
You covered a lot of ground. The story was very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.
Just all about fun - good people who made it and stupid people who didn't -
Really enjoyed reading it. More of that kind, please!! It was a pleasure..
Certainly enjoyed it, even though the attempted murder was a bit over the top the strongest element of the story was the true love story of the hero and June his heroine. This relaltionship seemed to hold a nugget of truth to it and could happen in real life also. His identification with the struggles of a single mother and her kids as was his own mother was quite strong and quite real also.
And one of the very few most excellent storys on this site. Very well done DG. Thank you.
I loved this story and the characters were perfect with the exception of June's ex. Thank you for the ride
...and I still think it is one of your best! Please more like this one. 5 Stars, of course..
Thanks for the happy read (my second time around)! 5 Stars
Randy is just a tad bit extravagant throwing money around. Trucking owners are tighter than a mouse's ear. Good writing and reading. Cheers!
Yes, maybe this story was over the top. But I enjoyed it. I guess I just like Love stories where two people eventually fall into a real, true Love. I am entertained when cheaters lose and non-cheaters win. I really felt good for Randy and June at the end. Thank you for writing this enjoyable, entertaining tale.
I thought DGH went overboard with Randy's money to express Randy's love for June. Surely if a spouse can give away five million bucks for a failed marriage why need a pre-nup agreement in the first place? And what is this about giving five hundred grand as a wedding present. Is he so afraid she might change her mind about marrying him?
Definitely a five star fun story with hordes of drama and money. Cheating girlfriends and wives up the gazoo. I could offer advice but why spoil it? Thanks for the effort and entertainment!
shit eating smile once I finished the story. DG is a fine writer and he did not disappoint with this one. Even though it was kind of cheesy. Not convoluted or complex or wanting to moralize. Just totally enjoyable read. I am kind of cheap at handing out 5 stars, but this one simply forced my hand. So with a grin and kudos to DG ......"Well Done !!"
Did you not write that he had ONE brother and TWIN sisters??
So why this bungle?? ((("It's like I already raised a family, my brothers and sister."))) A REALLY DUMB MISTAKE BUT A CASUAL PROOF READ WOULD HAVE PICKED IT UP. .... assuming that the proof reader was halfway alert and paying attention to business.
The story line is interesting but the dialogue is so stiff and stilted that it's almost as if it were written by a computer program. I did enjoy it though.
If you were an ex-Hubby, why would you try to kill the guy that could make your ex-Sweetie rich if you think you can get big money out of her? I would be guarding his ass until they marry! Then ... well, the picture turns around big time!
Why would ex-Hubby go out to the dance-hall with Chuck? Even if it made sense, why did he and the third guy wait outside while Chuck is acting-out with New Sweetie? And how do either know where Our Hero and New Sweetie are going that night? Think it through ... don't just write one interesting scenario after you finish the previous one
kind of a feel good story, but good. Sounded, like Rambo, in casual clothes, with a touch George Hamilton. I don't normally like the stories where the Hero always knows what's going on, or exactly how to react to every situation, it's just too far from reality. This was a nice feel good story.
At first I thought what the heck am I reading, but as I got into the story I enjoyed it!
Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.
like the idea of him being a drop out but making it big off his own bat...a good little tale....wonder if man mountain was the cause of those two jerks winding up in the lake....we will never know...in the end...true love conquered all...nice one....
The actual story was quite good but your writing style here was really 2nd rate - I expected a far higher standard from you. This is possibly your least effective story you've written, a competent 12 year old would probably surpass this effort. A very lucky 3 ***
Darn, you really came up with a wonderful story and it was well written. Thanks for sharing if with us.
but you left us with the mystery of just who shot him and why....was it Chuck and the asshole ex...and did big Bruce do it protecting him....we will never know....
And of course it was Bruce, he'd been trusted with security and to keep an eye on Chuck, so to protect his boss fell within his job description.
I have read this a few times I love it, keep writing great stories
especially when a setup and blackmail is involved, TK U MLJ LV NV
Enjoyed the story I'd have loved to know who shot him was her EX. or was it actually Chuck Woody with her EXs. gun.
Other than the story got a BIG FIVE STARS.
$100,000 for Bruce for knocking off the two hoods. Give me a break he gave his ex $300,000 fo fucking him over. He owed this guy much more than than what he gave him.
Why was he shot? The reason given by the author is crap! There was no explanation of who killed his attackers. They were killed immediately after they attacked him and none of his friends were present at that time. There is a huge hole in the plot.
I loved this, yes there were things left out yet it still told the story. I am a damn strong female and yet the caring and love well it is not often you find it and a man who is willing to fight for it sorry that is sexier than anything. I want my lover and my best friend to be in my bed and be the same person.
If he can give Shelby three hundred thousand dollars,how come he doesn't spread a little largess amongst his family.Also when did Brenda's husbands birthday party get rearranged.?
Excellent story,a bit abbreviated but nonetheless very nice. From his teens he supported his Mother in her struggle to maintain the family. A self made man who knew not to spread largessse amongst his relatives. Instead the deserving were placed in good jobs. Enjoyed the story. Thank you and 5*s.
At the very least you could have given it some thought, like a gift card to her favorite store. LOL
No really, it did sound like buying affection. Maybe, since she really loved her kids, a Trust for her lids, say for tuition and board to any school they wanted, through graduate school. Or...
Maybe “buy” her a business in some field he found she had an interest in? Like if she liked needle point, a needle point and embroidery specialty shop (really exists, swear to God).
If she liked riding, perhaps a 5 acre horse barn and stables.
SOMETHING that shows he gave thought to the expensive gift — a check, for crying out loud.
Another excellent story. I love the romances that you seem to be able to write about so wonderfully. This time about a very honorable and fair man and a new love and family that will love him forever. Bravo
He throws around so much money, that the generosity is lost. Taking care of everyone is great, consistent with a caring and generous man. Even paying the ex to get lost is fine. But a check for his new wife on their wedding night? Give her a credit card, maybe setup a half million trust fund for each of her kids. Giving the wife a check only serves to tell her what he thinks she’s worth.
Also, the story would have worked well if Randy had explained his background to June — how he grew up, dropped out, made himself... to set her mind at ease about her meager circumstances.
Great story, Seldom do I find stories about a good human being. Loved it
Everything just so perfect that it begs belief. However, I liked it notwithstanding. I was partly refreshed by the writer's command of our language as evidenced by correct spelling and syntax. A nice feel-good story with everything turning out perfectly for those in the white hats. I gave it four well-earned stars ...
When June goes for the interview,Marla recognises the gold card and later tells how much clout Randy has.Yet when Randy turns up she doesn't recognise either the gold card or him.