by sohowanderer
Brother is just a "boy toy" to them. He should just leave and go back to his wife. 3*
So I stopped reading after the 2nd paragraph. Check your work or get someone to check it for you otherwise you'll never retain readers.
Who cares about spelling and grammar mistakes? That's not why you came to this site now is it? Now be a good boy and clean your room up before dinner.
The frequency of grammar/spelling mistakes almost makes this story unreadable. Please proofread at least a little if you're not going to have someone else edit it for you. And add length. Short stories suck.
I want to see more from these three...Slightly more descriptive though. This was way too short.
this was a really good story - in fact all of your stuff is good - please keep writing - very sensual!
cheating stories are never good. if he wasn't married and this was longer it could have been good but you failed big time.
DBRS