All Comments on 'My Sister, the Virgin Ch. 02'

Very good story, keep it up.

(But did he really go running in blue jeans? ;) )

But you have to make your story believeable, and you have to hook the reader early. Someone going running in jeans is not believeable, so I had to abandon the story.

Look out everyone - the Fashion Police are in town! "My dear, you can't really expect to be taken seriously in a porno story wearing THAT color panties with your hair coloring? I simply won't allow it!"

I go along with such comments when they feature 14" dicks and size 44HHHH bras but dismissing a better-than-many porno story on sartorial grounds? Get real yourself!!

good but you need to keep track of what you write at the start of this chapter you say he takes off his shoes and socks while out running but then when in the bathroom his sister takes them off not possible since they were already off it's keeping track of the little things that make a story great make notes if you need to i hope you continue and don't leave us hanging like most of the loser writers here