All Comments on 'Mystice: The Making of a Slave'

Great story, can't wait for the continuation. Only a few corrections need to be made to make this story excellent. There are a few misspelled words and you were repetitious about Mystice's albinoism (or lack of).

I would really like to read more of this story. Would love to see Flame rescue her and for them to get together.

This has a direct, simple feeling of slow connection and foreshadowing that amplifies the final gratification.

There's also a bit of a sense of fantastic indulgence, in the character descriptions, in the name of entertainment.

Please write more about the subtle pleasures and conflicts of this delicately cruel world you've built.

Have you ever read Fafrd and Mouser?