All Comments on 'Naked Housecleaning'

I truly enjoyed this story. It seems to have a real-life quality to it, and believe it could have happened. Perfect descriptions add to the fantasy.

and a second chapter would be appreciated to describe their future encounters. The second chapter probably would wrap up all of their future meetings bringing their affair to a close.

Will look for more of your entries by making a note of your name.

Just noticed that you have written many more stories, to my delight! Hope no one bothers me for a while, while I catch up on some serious reading!

Loved it!

You captured the mores of the time of the story setting very well. I had the experience of viewing a topless woman through a window one night, but wasn't so fortunate as Ronald.

very believable and very erotic.

What are these words he's shocked to hear a woman use? Man, they're supposed to be fucking. Learn the maxim all good writers know: show, don't tell. Your spelling errors might be corrected in a later version. I hope.

For example, "self-riteous ." No, no, no, no!

Mary Jane Caruthers, Boise

She took an aweful chance. But you messed up a little. When she opened the door and called him by first and last name, she obviously knew him a little so that later she shouldn't have been too worried about him being underaged. She probably would have known pretty close what his age was already. He won't 'kiss n tell' and not because he doesn't want to mess upn a good thing but because he wants to do the right thing. That also means buying more condoms, which she didn't remember to remind him to purchase the next day. A good story, but you made him just a little too timid and her not quite old enough. She should be about 40, widowed, and childless. Write more.