All Comments on 'Nate and Jean'

I hope we get to hear about how Nate gets other women in the centre

For the read.

You could mine this for quite a while. Nate might even be a beneficiary in a will or few, down the road. Great beginning. 5*****

Easy ti read and flows fairly well.

Only fluffs were the lame start and some basic simple errors.

~The first three paragraphs almost stopped me continuing. Better if you can incorporate character information within the story. Stating things upfront sounds like a text book from school. I am glad I kept reading though as you have a nice easy style.

~She is a sexagenarian, or hexagenarian (60-69 yo), not septuagenarian (70-79 yo). I prefer the first one, seems to fit the story subject.

~Is his erection Ridged or Rigid? This is common and I am never certain if writers actually mean ridged, although this sounds more like a ribbed condom.

Give Nate (he's 24) a bit of hair for that great chest…she'll marvel at the hairy chest on her young man and will stroke and taste his chest and its hair lovingly!