All Comments on 'Nature Wooed Me'

This story has too many language problems and too much inconsequential background to be seriously considered in this contest.

A very tenuous connection to the contest theme, I have a suspicion you live elsewhere than the United States. This is more like a draft than a polished story. Interesting idea but needs to be developed further to real keep the reader's attention.

In the first paragraph you say "very overwhelming", for me, a thing is either ovewhelming or it isn't. However it didn't stop me enjoying the story. Thanks.

p.s. My tutor always said that the word VERY should be used sparingly in fiction; it indicates that the author can't find a single suitable word.