All Comments on 'Night with the Nanny'

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pinkpanties2013pinkpanties2013over 10 years ago

Please continue the stroy.

ladyk26ladyk26over 11 years ago

Love it! Obsessed.

captmoviecaptmovieover 11 years ago
keep on writing

Please continue the story. I want to know what happenes when he returns home.

tghlawyer03tghlawyer03over 11 years ago
Nicely told

How nicely you have told your story for a first attempt at writing. I think you have what it takes to make a really good writer: a command of the language, an understanding of the uses of punctuation; a flare for a well turned phrase; and a cogent plan. Please give us more and I will look forward to a continuation of this nice vignette or a second peek into that naughty imagination of yours...nicely told indeed..

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
More

That was great, only complaint is it ended too soon.

OileiyeahOileiyeahover 11 years ago
very nice

Looking forward for the next part btw happy holidays

wrecktechwrecktechover 11 years ago
Fantastic first story

Having worked in an office where remote connectivity is possible I've see where the cursor starts moving, windows open and close and you think the machine is possessed (more than usual anyway). Another possibility to consider besides typing something back is a webcam.

Pirate TregarePirate Tregareover 11 years ago
What a great concept!

Not only well-written for plot, but also very few errors (some first attempts are so atrociously error-filled as to be painful to read). The fresh concept is a scenario that has more than a passing semblance of plausibility. Please continue!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
great start!

more please!!!

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