All Comments on 'No More Monkeys...'

hope you've started writing the next parts cause that was awesome mate ^^

well written and hot; keep UP

Please post a sequel soon!

Smokin hot and perfect pace, not too rushed. Keep it up.

Wow, feller, when you are gonna write a novel, put book covers on it. Your style is good but it goes on forever and ever.

There must be some medium where you can publish your epistle that will be able to put book covers on it.

"No More Monkeys..." is making me go bananas for the next chapter.

To many words repeated to get to the end result, and most of them very unnecessary.

Less talk, more action.

thoroughly enjoyed it, good job

Funny, sexy, made me cum. Oustanding!

you took so long I lost it. Never your stories again

You mesmerized me until Dulcie was no longer believable. A finger in Your ass? Really? From a lil virgin girl? i dont think so....she is way too savvy for my own tastes. Otherwise, you write very well. i want more...

I Enjoyed it, though Dulcie at the end, as the comment before me said, she seemed a bit too...savvy. However I enjoyed the fact that there was a story. So, Continue writing. I'll keep an eye on you.

Little long but the build up was amazing. You really got the feel of the way he thought. Once the buildup was intense you ended it with the same flow, not breaking it for a cheap quick end. Loved it, fav'ed it, reading it again

you should add more, including Jeanie and Carolyn

I was going insane by page 4 , in a good way lol

Totally. sick. In a. good. way.!

Naturally, it belongs to the most worthless nation in the world.

Fucking degenerate Brits ! "1*" !!

not too long. After all he wasn't in the idea to fuck his daugther in the first place.

Personally I read the 6 page with pleasure. Nice story Thanks !

I absolutely LOVED it! I really enjoy ur writing, in general, so far :) U certainly got MY cunt hot and wet!! I love so much about it but especially that u eased into it and gave a very detailed image of their lives together as father and daughter before the sex comes into play. I can't wait to read the rest!

They writing these stories. "1*" !!!

The sex at the end was meh, okay, but the buildup was so offputting. So many tangential thoughts going on within the narration. It’s very, very distracting. Also, lose the phrase “mental note”!

The story takes 3 almost 4 pages before anything actually worth telling happens, and when it does it's just not that great. Take down and rework the story, cut out all of the bumf and then the story may keep the attention.

Everyone has preferences, I disagree with the other comment. This was well timed and spaced to tease before the finale. Very stimulating story thank you.