by hotknight
Absolutely wonderful! Always kept me thinking when they would tell each other that they loved each other, you did a magnificent job on this story.
this is getting better and better... i was just wondering when he's gonna take her ass... :P
but I feel like something is missing with the characters... all we seem to read about is them having sex and being sexual (which is not a bad thing)... you hint that on occasions they talk but I wish we could see/read more about them getting to know more about each other's personalities and lives. This would make their "I love You" more meaningful/believeable to me.
I'll be looking out for the next chapter.
and also the start of ch. 2, but by the end of the ch. I slowly ask myself, where is he heading ? As it is nicely written one just goes along but making a summery in the end of ch.2 there is no story, just fucking like in a cheap movie. therfore I can not give you anymore 100.
Delicious offering you have here, I was very happy to see that she was finally able to allow herself to open up and love again... their sex was very hot and intense, and I look forward to reading how wonderful their love-making will be!
Thank you for sharing...
This story was HOT. A man like that can be my type any day. Thank you for this hot story.
This is a wonderful story but it's way too long. I think it should have been split up into 3-4 smaller chapters. This way more people would read it and enjoy such a hot, sexy, sensual story.
Seriously, where have you been this whole time? I'm looking forward to future submissions. I would've liked the characters to be a bit more fleshed out but I'm not complaining. That was some pretty fantastic stuff.
I have zero complaints about this story - because it was so damn good!! I don't care if you told it in two super long installment, or 50 mini installments - it was bloody brilliant!
I only had time to read a little each day, but I found myself wondering what would happen next. A perfect story! I can not wait for the next chapter!
Yep, I dug it... I'm holding on to this one!! Thank you "hotknight", well done.
reminds me of my boyfriend.... reading this got me so hot and thinking about him all day. please write more!
MMMMMmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....I want more!!! Although I do agree it could be somewhat shorter.
I personally think this is a good spot to leave Mark and Jasmin.
I'd love to meet some new characters in new stories!! We know you can do it!!!!
Give us moooore!!!!!
God...I'm so wet right now....please right more stories if they are as hot as these!!
This has been one of the best erotic rides I've gone through! On the one hand I see this being pretty done, but on the other, I want more and can see so many possibilities for our sexy couple to continue.
It was very hot. However, the word "turgid" is an instant turnoff. It sounds...bad. Otherwise great.
Absolutely loved it - shame it was so long - it could have been in three parts - but it had so much hot stuff in it as well as a tender story. Write one for me please!!!
LOVE IT!! the whole story rocks! Very very well-written and the execution and timing of the confession from Jasmin (and I thought at first it was Mark) was fantastic! Just the right amount of surprise and 'awwwwww' factor without being too mushy or overrated. double kudos! Keep up the great work! I look forward to seeing this published and reading new or other works from you. Hoping to read a sequel to this ^_^
i'm usually the short-and-sweet type... but these 2 chapters have been the ONLY long stories i've read on this site. they keep me so entertained the whole way thru. don't listen to anyone else, the length is fine (which is why your stories are among the most-read).
keep writing. and i will keep reading
This is an incredible journey into sensuality and personal discovery as well as emotional healing. There is still more explorations into the emotional aspects to be done, so the story cannot be complete at this point. In addiiton, there has been no mention of Mark's past relationships which might just explain why he was so insistent upon overcoming Jamin's initial voiced limits on their "arrangement". With his confidence level, he surely couldn't have been just a horny dude out to get laid and felt the challenge was the gauntlet being cast before him. He obviously knows his way around the eroticism of a woman's body and mind which would indicate some rather sophisticated experiences. Regardless, there is so much more to explore in their "arrangement" (now blossoming into a full love relationship) that surely you cannot feel compelled to stop now. Keep on going...PLEASE!!!
Thankyou so much for your stories. Your amazing and explicit descriptions of Jasmin's feelings throughout led me to initially believe you were female. Once again an amazingly well written erotic journey. BRAVO!! Hope you continue writing.
Wow I could have been Jasmin at one time in my life but my Mark was not to be! This was a great story!
I loved this story! I read it once, read it twice and could not stop myself from reading it again. It was wildly romantic and very sexy. Mark was an amazing creation, I would gladly get hit by a car to meet someone like him! Captivating story, engaging characters. Great work! Looking forward to more stories from you!!
For those of us who like our sex and romance in nearly equal parts, this has got to be the best story on Literotica. It's such a perfect mix, as romantic as it is sexual. A somewhat neurotic heroine, but not to the point she makes you sick. An aggressive, but surprisingly sweet hero. Plot and pace amazing. And for those of you that think it's implausible, you are wrong, but even if you were right, this is FICTION and one of the great things about fiction is everything is plausible. And if after reading this story, the only things you can think to comment on are word choice and grammar, I hope you find a scholarly erotica site that suits your needs. I adore this story! My only wish is that hotknight would consider posting something else.
You are a magnificent writer, this is a wonderful story.
And I think it's great that it's long.
I want a chapter three!
Fuck, just write a book. I'd buy it for sure.
Excellent and very arousing. Hope you can find time to submit more. Thanx for your contribution to this community.
I loved your story and was increasingly drawn in to the non-stop sensuality you created on the screen (page)TY
So basically, that was amazing.
I wish I had someone to fuck right now
And live out these fantasies with.
I am exhausted, just reading all that! In a very good way, of course ;)
I think the author of this has just described my ideal man.
This has to be the best story i have ever read. It blends romance and just plain old fucking in a beautiful way. I like the way you didn't just concentrate on the sex part of the story but made it a typical everyday life kind of story. And the sex scenes are all mind blowing. Thats another thing that shocks me, how can you have so so many sex scenes in one story and have the readers still wanting more. Wow!!! Exhausted from reading this story because my heart beat rate has tripled. Please please please write some more stories and if you decide to write a book, i can even be on the line to get it first as early as midnight!!!
Best story I've ever read! Just absolutely fantastic. ;)
You brought down the end in a very nice, easy, controlled way, like the last several yards of a wild roller coaster ride. Thank goodness for nerds.
that was the hottest story from beginning to end. i hope and pray that one day i am jasmin and i meet my mark!
Perfect end to a perfect story!!! The "You better be ready for me bastard" scene made me laugh..sexy as hell!!
Well done...
~
Gary (Garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.com)
I don't think I have ever read a story that makes me horny as hell but makes me go "aww" at the same time. I hope to all the deities that this is not your last submission. Holy crap, if I ever find a man who has as much patience and stamina as Mark does, I would be the happiest woman ever. Words are really not enough to express what a joy this story was to read. And it was well written, too! What more can we ask from an author? Well, another story would be nice actually. Quality, quality, and quality throughout.
I've read Not Her Type about 5 times. And that is a lot of time considering how long each chapter is. But let me tell you, they are well worth it. I liked how you just mentioned some of their intimate moments rather then showing us. It makes sense because Jasmin is the narrator and she doesn't want it to get personal. No expectations. The progression into their "I love you" was very subtle which showed when Jasmin tells Mark as if she had said it before. Awesome, awesome, great, wonderful, fantastic story.
If only I could find someone with Mark's control...I think my expectations just went up.
Best I have ever read here...!!! You are amazing! I see alot of myself in Jasmin... need to find a guy like Mark to keep up with me.... and now ! If I like him enough... I'll have to share your stories with him...
LOVED EVERY FREAKY THRILLING MOMENT OF THIS STORY....!! JST WISH YOU COULD HAVE ADDED AN EQUILOGE ON THESE 2!!! STILL ITS A 5 TOO ME!!! THANKZ 4 THE READ!!!
I dub thee the knight of hot sex. From now on, use your VLIW and glasses for good. :)
So intense! Sums up the perfect sexual fantasy for a woman. Only criticism is that I feel you may have got bored toward the end and wanted to wind the story up quickly; the love declaration was a bit sudden and I feel the characters' emotional relationship was not established quite thoroughly enough to make it believable...
Great work though, sexiest erotica I've ever read :)
I thoroughly enjoyed both parts! Very, very well written, everything flowed and drew me into the story. Sexiest erotica I've read in a long time. I'd love to see a third installment!
This was the best story I have read on this site. Reminds me of someone I used to know, now I want him back :)
Didn't think you could top the first story, but...... truly awesome!!!!
Wonderfully written. I'm not really into reading lots of text online but this is one of the few I'd happily read a couple of times. Excellent.
Pure enjoyment - and great detail for one's brain to process. I hope you write more!
Funny how love sneaks up on you with the most unlikely person. More chapters please?? Damn this was sooooooooo good :>)
OMG, please...please...please come out with a third chapter to this story. It was very well written and extremely interesting. I'm in love with these two characters lol :)
This is so amazing! You should do more, your writing and detail is awesome. I loved it, and have read it many times now :D
I'm reading this for the 23rd time and it never fails to get me turned on. I love the "aww" factor at the end. Completely unexpected but so right! The series sounds like it ends here so now I'm just waiting for more of your writing. You have talent and it's only fair that you share it.
I had a good laugh at the tag you have for this chapter: cocksucking. There's a bit more than that happening in this chapter such as mind-blowing sex! haha, I'll be waiting for your next piece.
Loved the story and the characters... I've been all hot and bothered ever since... Mark is the kind of lover every woman should have... I wonder if this character is based on anyone real...
I read your first one and i was glad that she said the words
In the 3rd one you should show how her friends react to them
Your great
you need to right a book.i would read it
I wish I was in place of Jasmine and had a guy like Mark. Or maybe my guy should take coaching from Mark. Definitely going to refer this story to him!
This is honestly the first erotic story I've actually continued reading after I came. Mark reminds me so much of my bf and I found myself really wanting them to get together. Not often do I find a story meant for jacking off to that I actually care about the characters. Thanks for a fantastic story!
-A girl
Too bad you haven't written any other stories. This was quite enjoyable and Mark's stamina... :)
I'm hoping one day to experience that type of intimacy with someone I absolutely love.
I said I would enjoy the story better if you made them fall in love, and you did! you're awesome WOOOO! write more :)
I love these stories, and this was one of the best: Nothing like someone who is "detail oriented" and paying attention, and giving all of their attention to the particular happenings of the moment!
Smart man, too, to wait this woman out, until she was ready to face the truth!
A nerd can be a diamond in the rough! Too many young women don't get that!
GREAT STORY!!!
I was glued to this story and read it multiple times! You absolutely should write books! I would buy them in a heart beat!!!
This was an amazing story! All the scenes were so steamy and hot. But I love how you told it from his pint of view too. How he loses control and his thoughts about how he made her feel. Absolute perfection :).
Best damn story I've ever read here. Hope you do lots lots more!
deep breathless content sigh - thank you, hotknight - you made me smile, pant and seriously fall in love with your story.
One of the absolute best love stories I have ever read... Thanks SO much for sharing it with us.
All the elements of a great story. Hot, steamy, and romantic, yet nothing gross or violent, like some of the stories. I loved this one. One of the best! Loved the Romantic Bath and that fact that the guy was making breakfast and baking bread. Anticipation was wonderful (too bad more guys don't figure this out).
Simply incredible...the ending was just perfect. You definitely made me fall in love with Mark Archer.
Totally awesome ending... I've got my very own mr archer that makes me feel the same way so I loved this story even more!
I couldn't stop reading this! You had me from the first paragraph. I found myself wanting Mr. Archer, not just sexually either. This is definitely worth a rating of 5 stars, as its a great read. Thanks so much for such an amazing, adventurous, exciting story!! :)
Does this toy actually exist? If so, I want one!!!!!!!
I wish for everyone this kind of sensual, sexual experience! Absolutely one of the top 3 of way too many stories I've read. Just stupendous. And thank you for writing it. A perfect voyeuristic read.
Too bad such is only fantasy. I would love a relationship like that. Loved the story.
Thanks for posting it.
XOXO VIXXXEN
just wanted you to know that I LOVE your story! It is amazing and well written, you have done an awesome job! Thank you so much for sharing
Super sexy story. Mark is like the Dream Man of the Century. You write so well and this story is my all time favorite. Dont disappear on us, keep writing! :)
This story is amazing! I want to read more about Jasmine and Mark's love life and how she jasmine will explain him to her friends. Please post more!
I have read this stories for years, but no story has ever made me feel so much a part of the story. Ilteriorly, gave me shivers when he kissed her at the end. Wonderful writing abilities. Thank you for sharing your story with us I only wish there was more to read. Thank You.
indeed you are a writer! you've just created wonderful characters and i may find myself sometimes wanting a mr archer too. xoxoxo
That was simply breathtaking. It made me remember what it was like when I met my husband... Just simply breathtaking!!
What a hot horny chick! I wish I had an affair like that! Incredibly sensuous!
I have to tell you, I really regret rating any previous stories as 5 stars after reading this. I didn't know what a 5-star story was until now. This is amazing on so many levels it's ridiculous. I really hope you write more because you've got some serious talent. I adore these characters and the sex was some of the hottest I've read. Very well written, very well developed, very sweet, very sexy, very fun, and very, very satisfying. My only wish is that there was more of this- perhaps another chapter that allows us to see her telling her friends and integrating their lives more? Who knows. It's perfect as it is, but so much so that I'm sad to see it end. Thank you for sharing this with us!
Damn that was hot! Great story and great characters. Glad they actually hooked up at the end. Wish you'd come back and write more.
This is the story by which all others will forever be measured! Fantastic!