by FerdGerfel
Definitely one to pull on the heartstrings. I think though it more properly belongs under the First Time category instead of the Erotic Couplings, if only to avoid building up false expectations of what the story might contain in people's minds. I was all ready for a hot, bend-me-over and fuck me type story. What I got was a tender, glad I could share this special moment with you story.
Still good, regardless.
I didn't mean for this to be this kind of story, it kind of found its own way there. I thought about putting it in the first time category but in the end I left it here. I'm not sure if there's a way to change the category after it's posted.
I really enjoyed reading this story.because it was a nice change of pace. I hope that you'll consider maybe writing another chapter (or maybe two) just to see where your imagination takes these two characters next. Whether you do write another chapter or not, do keep writing more stories because you're good. Keep up the good work!
The way you wrote about the things he was thinking.. It was perfect. Very realistic in almost every way :)
Very good story. Seriously if you have more chapters I think you could be published. I liked the background story and the build up.