by RejectReality
"Where do I begin to tell the story of as great a love can be". You have.
can't wait to see the dynamic grow. Holly becomes much more than an associate.
Fantastic,... BEGINNING.
The beginning of a love affair, a relationship.
The start of a love story and masterfully done.
It SCREAMS for resolution!!!
Please, please, please, give us more!!!
I am blissfully married and hope to stay that way for the rest of my life. If, however, I were to find myself alone and in the company of one such as Holly, I would hope that I would have the wisdom and compassion to treat her in this manner. This story is a true gem.
I have read several of your stories. All have been HOT particularly this one.
As the others great writing but your endings are like falling off a cliff, falling but no ending.
I immensely enjoyed this story and don't know that i have read any better anywhere. I think that the author really needs to follow this up with another telling the readers what they have done after this first story has ended. Please continue with the story.
Definitely need a Part II, even a Part III! Gave a ranking of 4, due to my fat fingers. S/B a 6!
and here and now this really does need a 2nd chapter!
I have read this story more than twice and have enjoyed it each time. It sounds plausible and believable. It sure turned me on. I would love to see the follow up story(ies) to this one if there is one or more. It makes me want to write a follow up to it but, I think that is or should be the author's prerogative.
Holly is the perfect fantasy for every guy over 40. This is a great tale. Realistic in presentation and flow. More please!
This is worth your time to read. Even I who lost most of my ability to have an erection due to prostate surgery could feel some old familiar sensations.
I know its a fantasy, and total wish-fulfillment, but thank you for the ride. 5 stars.
Dear Reject, (pun intended)
While the sex was fabulous, the soul of the story was awesome. The gentleness and sensitiveness shown floored me with admiration.
Keep writing with that kind of caring and sensitivity.
I agree with the previous comment, please continue the story! Well developed and deserves another chapter or two. Maybe a nude vacation in the RV?
So what happens with the two of them? You need to do a follow up story. You just left it hanging. In my favorites
Ron. Texas
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Really liked the characters and storyline, flow, speed, etc... And So Hot ... DKP
Love the characters. Very accessible. Their motives and reactions make sense as they open themselves up for intimacy. Your world is a nice place to visit. Please continue this story because you have hit a rich vein of character and environment.
Very, Very Hot, Very Bothered, and waiting with baited breath for chapter 2,3,4... You really know how to tell an amazing story. Good character development, good pace, nice plot progression, and very intelligently presented. You, obviously, know how to tell a story! Please don't let this story end here; it's much too good to let end with this chapter.
that was truly an incredibly wonderful story!! thank you so much!!
This is probably one of the best I have read on this site. The sexual tension from the beginning to the break point before the next chapter in this steamy love affair. The hint of forbidden love, boss & assistant, almost like Alan became a surrogate father taking his daughter cherry, to teach her how real should treat his baby girl. I was truly excited and unloaded a couple of times just from the intense description you provided in this hot story. Thank you.
My goodness--I wish my first time--and every time after--were like that. There was only ever one man I begged to take me like that. And I thought of him while I came reading this story...right along with the characters. Bien!
I'm more than twice your age, and your comments at the bottom of your biography seemed detached and nearly cold. Your story, on the other hand, was totally warm and tender. I felt pure love. Hope you'll write more about Alan and Holly and that your other works will reflect the same gentleness that this did.
I hope there's a part 2 to this story, it was very sexy and cock raising.
Just wanted to say thanks to all the anonymous people who have commented. I'll reply to the individual comments in a little while.
This story has a better than average chance of becoming my first multi-parter, because I already have a couple of ideas to continue it that aren't just sex and more sex.
A very good buildup of the personalities and characters of the parties involved leads to romantics then to erotica.
You owe your readers a followup.
Gave you 5* and hope you get first prize and write more good stories.
My only complaint is, it was almost at the bottom of the first page where I learned the story-teller was male. It might have been a female boss hiring a young woman. The word "Alan" might have been worked in earlier, or something like "sir" or "Mr. Smith" or something to make it clear it was a man hiring a woman assistant.
Nice erotic story though. Don't we all wish this could happen to us? "I reject my reality and substitute your own." <grin>
Loved reading a story, where the nice guy finishes first.
very nice series of events, even if based on many coincidences. I like it very much.
Good luck! This is one of the hottest stories I have ever read...
...I have nothing more to add. Just yes, please... pick me, pick me! I'd like to be Alan's assistant. Or yours.
Great job on creating very likeable characters, as well as a good plot to lead to some excellent erotic moments. Please write more!
Just hot, and Alan's reluctance made it more powerful in a way. Also, a bit of karma. He had taken a chance on her, and she had done her best for him, and he couldn't say no to doing his best for her, once he was sure that's what she wanted.
I really appreciated the way you delineated Alan's and Holly's characters before placing them in a sexual situation. Alan's reluctance was a nice touch, too.
Really vivid potrayal. great work. Cud actually visualize it. True, hot erotica. Any fact element or is it pure fiction??
This is the way stories are supposed to be - loving, caring and romantic. Please write more stories, or at the very least please tell me what happens next? . . .5* and good luck!
Great story, but I think it needs another chapter to finish the story.
Who needs Viagra with Holly around? Hot, but also romantic and very realistic. I reject your name, but wholeheartedly accept your reality. 5*s and good luck in the contest!