All Comments on 'Oasis In The Desert Ch. 03'

I feel I was part of the whole story

When You read a story like this it is very evident that a writer "did it pround" as they say and the reader feels they are part of the story. Hope there are more like it in the writer soul and we shall see more of them.

Loved the story but I feel like I missed a chapter someplace. Who are all of these new people. After reading Chp. 1 and 2 I feel lost reading chapter 3 it feels like I'm reading chapter 4 or maybe even five.

But still a great story.

Heather

Raises the level to a new high of tasteful erotica. Took a while but had to read Ted and Julie's story. This covers all three chapters and sub chapters.

HOT stull..great details,vibrant characters, HOT STEAMY sex...terrific. I downloaded text of stories to read on Palm as I travelled on recent trip..alot of hardon in flight!!!

THANKS FOR SHARING.

You have great talent; this is the best story on the site, IMO.

I think I have read this story over five times. When I find a story with deapth I want to rember it. it seemed like a real feasable story. I would love for my wife and I to be invited to a party like that. I only wish you would do more of this story. I am not certain where the direction would go, but I would read so much more about this couple.

Quite possibly the greatest tale of erotica ever. What an artist!!!

a very good story great contex not just about sex but it all went together great as a well written story.

Where on earth do we all find ourselves a Julie?

I can safely say without a doubt that this is the best story I've ever read on here!

This story is very well done. Nice development of characters, a great story approach for some of us who want more than a quickie. The pace was too fast towards the end and too many other characters were quickly included without sufficient development. I cared about the Ted & Julie, who had a very good romantic development, which is very important in erotic writing. I could have continued reading about them in a novel length writing, though their characters would need a bit more depth. I consider myself straight, though my curiosity and fascination with very feminine transgenders continues. I wonder if I would be as loving and accepting as Ted if ever I found a Julie?

But on a critical writing note, you must proofread and correct all errors. This work demonstrates that spellcheck reliance alone will not do. Many little mistakes in errant wording and punctuation gravely affect the flow of reading.

You sir are truly gifted when it comes to writing. You have found yourself a spot on my Favorites list and I cant wait to read the rest of your works.

I had to come reread this beautiful masterpiece again after reading Jackie. Except for the telltale grammar errors like "of cause" instead of "of course", I can't bring myself to believe that hateful mean-sprited garbage and this beautiful sensitive impossibly understanding story were written by the same person. I wish I could understand how Scribler went from this amazing masterpiece, so understanding and sensitive of real transwomen, to a horrifying hateful piece of garbage like Jackie. I just can't fathom the drastic change.

I wish Scribler would go back to Beautiful work like this, hateful garbage like Jackie is so far beneath Scribler's potential.

I loved the whole thing especially the swinger part and how the couples got together very often to have orgies. I didn't think it couldve got better till you added her two hot sisters that liked orgies and fucking one another as well.

J have just finished the complete series. It has to be one of the best serials I have read. Well devekoped, well narrated. One small criticism - your spell checker let you down occasionally. Thank you

The best ending ever!

This was a fantastic story and it left me wanting more.

Loved it, had a tear in my eye when dad appeared. keep writing!!

Love,

Rory

What a nice end, as always fantastic stories

Such a wonderfully written story. Thank you! Where can I find a romantic sugar daddy like Ted?

I read this story a very long time ago... but, after a reread... I found it littered with spelling errors, misused punctions or no punctions where needed. Whomever edited this story, did a lousy job. The readability and flow were hampered by such errors. That's one of the common mistakes her on Lit... people just don't know how to properly edit.

Second, even though this is a transgender story... the straight up man-to-man gay sex was unnecessary and rather distasteful in a rather erotic love story! Even if a straight guy falls for a trans... they're not gonna have gay sex with men... so, the whole gay thing should've never been in this story! The whole orgy thing was farfetched, especially with the sisters involved. This element could've been better without the gay sex. It didn't help the story... it was rather a buzzkill!

Finally, overall... the story was good for half the reading... if not more so... the orgy killed it...