All Comments on 'Offspring Ch. 022'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

It seems everytime you have the chance to add a twist you fail to. So far, the ships could have been illusions caused by humans using the drug, she could have been going to fuck someone else who just apeared to fuck her, he could have seen himself fucking her... the list goes on. You had such a great premiss that you could have taken in so many directions but its resolving so straithforwardly.

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