by Jaywesal
Continuity check. You called Jim Sam at one point. Betty has bright blue eyes at the top of the page, and brown eyes at the bottom. Little things like that make the difference between a good story and a great one.
I don't care about the color of her eyes or someones name - it is a great story and I hope you continue it.
wow. this story had me throbbing and cumming lots. one of my greatest fantasies.