All Comments on 'On the Lam'

Not necessarily the best story, sure he got his, but for a(n even fake) reconciliation, I would like to see some redemption arc other than her feeling bad. Obviously, thanks for writing it. I would have done it myself and better, but had to mow the lawn this past weekend, maybe next time.

The one thing I find more troubling than the story not going exactly the way I would have liked is the amount of politicization being inserted into these stories and not just this writer. The amount of judeo-liberal gift to the unwilling host including but not limited to interracial relationships, dieversity and feminism is astounding.

Why do women in your stories get away with so much nonsense? In almost all of your stories women are perfectly fine with cheating and then they don't show any remorse at all. And your male protagonists always just give in in the end. I'm not particularly averse to reconciliation but there's literally no effort on part of the women to earn forgiveness or to show even a little bit of remorse. It seems you have a seriously skewed view of fidelity

Yeah.... No.... I wish I hadn't read the sequel. 2/5 BRB

It seems that some don't care for how you tried to 'fix' the story. Remember the song from the early 70s - Garden Party? 'You can't please everyone so you got to please yourself' - I think that is basically JPB's motto. Personally, I enjoyed both parts! Thanks.

somewhere east of Omaha

It’s simple. Reverse the story ... David takes a young lover and Doris is???? Fine with it? All the women in that family are fine with it? NO! They would not be. So why write a story where NONE of the women feel the pain of infidelity?

I gave you a five anyway....

You are a despicable horrendous bastard.

The views you are pushing with this story are so toxic that you can actually make the world a worse place than you left it, and not in a you as a group but you as an individual.

Seeking faithfulness is not male pride, it's seeking what one actually wants. ALL of your characters are only worth the rope it takes to hang them.

They're abusers, manipulators and evil to the core.

Each and every one of them deserves extreme public humiliation and punishment, body and mind. Rape, beatings, torture, abuse and butchering their bodies.

It's not so much the cheating, although that is bad, it's their backstabbing ways. And what's worse, you try to make it seem romantic.

If just one of the people that has read your stories actually takes what you wrote to heart families will be destroyed.

No curse is strong enough and horrendous enough for the likes of you, but whatever is worse may it follow you forever!

Horrendous ending to what was a promising story. The wife continues to Cuck him, he clicks another guys slutty wife and he’s back in with the family that tried to blackmail him by getting him drunk and taking a picture in a compromising position?

Disappointed in this sequel as I was at the end of the originals story. Loved it until the ending

Author mucked the sequel. While I liked some of his nefarious business deals, it was sad to see him turn 180 degrees to accept the open marriage lifestyle, even when Doris never really apologized and certainly no contrition. She banged Mark for 8 months wallowing in the great sex (even knowing her one time cost her David and the initial thrill would be muted given David's abandoning her with zero contact). Nope all she can think is how great the sex with Mark is, how she is entitled to it, how David was dull, and yet she has zero emotional attachment to Mark. There is really no guilt expressed on the written page. Yes she comes to an accommodation (in reverse) with David's new (pregnant) mistress, agreeing to break it off with Mark, after rhat had already fizzled after so many months, but she still feels she was entitled because David was so dull, hid things from her, and after so many years of being a loving and faithful wife, she was owed this, based on the corrupt influences of her MIL and mom and Ann and their bombastic accommodations with their male partners. At least Larry gets a happy ending. But what is David really coming back to and why. Doris' half hearted attempts to reconcile on the last page are lame and she instead works out a deal with the new mistress. David cannot divorce Doris because of all the financial and legal light that would be shed on his dirty real estate empire. But he has no need to be anywhere near Doris. If she files for divorce for abandonment (which seems out of character for her), she discovers nothing big about his shady business empire. Well written, but characters either never grew up and owned what they did (Doris) or turned 180 on defining moral issues in Jailbreaking (David). Jailbreaking was such a better story imo. Too bad. Doris flipped a.switch in the first story and never really apologized or admitted fault. Just brokered an agreement with his mistress, so she is wife again. Ouch.

David spent 20 years being manipulated by Doris and left when all the women in his family tried to manipulate him into being a willing cuckold. You end it by him once again being manipulated by two sexually promiscuous women, one of whom is the wife who cuckolded him and drove him away in the first place. Do you realize that you did this ?

An overly long story with an unexplained ending hastily put together to serve its purpose.

From page 3,,,,, aren't Canadians also Americans.?

Terrible cuck story. Long winded with a bunch of crap.

I enjoyed reading the story! It had all the intrigue to make it gripping and entertaining. I'm not a fan of Hotwife stories, but it didn't deter my enjoyment too much! As others have commented, the morales of the characters are shit. Still, I gave it 5*

All that power and the fool doubles down in the den of whores and cucks otherwise known as his family. Great writing, but the shittest cuck stories. I thought tge first chapter was disappointing. The only thing missing was the usual BBC/poor white cuck hubby bullshit.

Only 3 stars because he mixed himself up with his soulless family of sluts again, why lose his backbone now

Well told tale. Would have been a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ except for the cheating and disrespect shown by the women. Almost made me sick. He should never have taken her back.

Dude! I can’t believe you come here for morality! This is a stroke site. Searching for morality here is like going to Pornhub for their much vaunted spiritual teachings.

After all, sometimes you hear people crying out, “Oh God, oh God!” So, it must be spiritual, right!

M/C is not very likable and his family consists of one way street individuals…. The story to circle the tub waiting for some smuck to drop the soap…..

⭐⭐ It could be a great story, until some idiot takes a cheater back. CRASH!

Great story told by a great storyteller!

Christ, your New York morals are shining through in nearly every paragraph of this trash. This is why the world is truly headed for an end.

As some have said, David changed his values from keeping his marriage vows for himself to going with an open marriage. Now, if that turn around was explained, so be it, but it was not. Thus this story is extremely whimsical as to why he would change so. To this end I do not rate his as a logical conclusion to the story, just an Author, trying to stir up readers emotions. Or is the Author just showing their inner psyche of how they think, deep down?

The fact that he ended up going to the dark side, joining a lifestyle he supposedly hated, totally destroyed the story for me.

He did a 180 from the first story which was totally illogical for the type of person he was and for the values he held. I will read the first story but not bother with this one as its just words on paper but a story it is not, well a not logical one.

N.B. Americans speak American English not (British) English. Totally different. How can a British person speak with and English accent when English is their root language, the just speak English. All other persons speak English with their own English accent. Same for French etc. Its such a shame Americans cant use several letters from the English language when the talk. Water is pronounced Waler (Listen to Frozen 2). there are several others letters. It is just so infuriating I want to turn it off.

"Most Americans speak English." I'm English and I take issue with that assertion :-D

Great two part story. Enjoyable reading

Jailbreaking was one of the best. This sequel, nope. It felt like JB was written for the audience and this feels like it was written for the author. This would be a good MM story.

So, in the end, he just gave in to the slut wife and mother... He may be rich but he is one spineless wimp. For him... Life IS a Bitch and he may be the Bitch !

Agree with previous commenter. This story was a poor sequel to Jailbreaking. Ironically with some minor tweaks it could have been. In thr first story, hsi entire family misunderstood what drove him and why he stayed. I am fine with painting him as a hopeless, idealistic romantic in this story under siege from conniving, pragmatic, and ultimately delusional women in his life. But the mistake was more with Doris. Doris in the first story was bester by a mother and MIL who both had twisted views and accommodations with their husbands because of their husbands first cheating. Her sister in law, Ann, didn't help as well she is an unrepentant slut and bitch and her brither Larry was a victim, who didn't speak up (at least he got a happy ending).

But the big mistake was Doris in this story. Doris is a smart, intellectual woman. She was devoted to a man she adored for something like 19 years. Even when under pressure and given terrible, corrupting advice, in Jailbreaking, she almost didn't go along with it and backed out. But then the MIL told her she would loser her prospective lover and she she burned her marriage. There is no doubt she is a cheater. But unlike the rest of the women (and some men) in her extended family, she was almost an edge case, over the fence of adultery, but maybe redeemable. Maybe. Then of course the MC runs. And why not? He rejected the ultra feminist bs of the women in his family and fled to a life of freedom. Yes this story sought to bring them back together but with a paradigm shift in their marriage. But the failure is Doris while pining for her husband was still banging Mark, eight months after he left, reveling in how exquisite a lover he was, while sadly reflecting on the loss of the love ofnher life? Wtf? Nor did her subsequent dialog paint any real form of on page contrition about her lengthy affair, except her deal she worked out with Annette to be the MC's mistress (and a pregnant one at that). I will accept that she did that out of guilt, realizing without reversing the dynamic, including dumping Mark, returning to being faithful to David and allowing him a mistress, she would never get him back.

Forget the other women in the combined family. They are lost and largely there soul is dead or twisted. Their accommodations with their husbands ruined them as people, and they have zero remorse, just obsessive desire to have David back in their lives (except Ann, meh). As an aside, woman having higher libidos post menopause is one of the lamest tropes in LW fiction. It is usually the reverse. Men have needs that cannot be met as the woman gets through menopause. She may have flashes of horniness on HRT, etc but by the time they hit their late 50s or.early 60s, they have lost a lot of libido..Men have sexual lust still as they age, unless serious health problems, and Viagra, etc takes care of the plumbing problem for most men. So hear the two mothers just come off as unrepentant sluts as they age.

But Doris could have been different. Yes she was wrong in the first story and did not know what her husband truly felt. But after he left, shorten the time with Mark to like a month. A few encounters. Have ger feel guilt and remorse. Have her feel like she drove him away. The man she proclaims to love. When her mother and MIL try to sway her continue, have her tell them they just want her to cheat so they feel better about their own whoring around. She is supposed to be smart and fundamentally a good person. Obviously she screwed up badly at the end of the first story, but here in this story there is a HUGE.missed opportunity. Have her break away from the twisted crap of her MIL.and mother. Limit her time with Mark, dump him.ince the initial thrill is past, have her feel real guilt and sorrow, and have her tell Larry to tell David she will wait for him no matter hoe long it takes. She just wants to see him to apologize. Have her break away from the corrupted sluts. Have her state real repentance. Have her go to therapy. Have her tomthe steps to going back to what she was. Instead the author has her sleep with Mark for eight months or more on a regular basis, and while she misses her husband, she still waces about how exquisite a lover Mark is and how dull her husband is.

Look his trips around the world, meeting Annette and others of her network of friends and family was all good. I even enjoyed what was the real source of his funds and how he outsmarted the State Senator. All good. We knew if he was just "dull" he couldn't suddenly be rich with money as an aphrodisiac like he states at the end of the first chapter. And yes it paints him as a crook and a liar.

However, that betrayal while it might help to.level the playing field doesn't compete with nearly nine months of f$ck sessions with Mark, especially 180 degree change in attitude at end of first chapter, her lack of repentance, and her sleeping with Mark the first time, which set David free.

There are glimmers of her remorse in their brief dialog on last page and again in the reversal of accommodation, he gets both Doris and Annette and Doris doesn't play with others. But it coukd have been so much more. Lessen the betrayal. Have ger get an epiphany of guilt and remorse. Stand up to the sluts (they are not relevant at all to the conclusion of the story). Even help.put Larry her brother through his terrible times with Ann and have Doris see how twisted the cheating hurts the aggrieved spouse. Maybe have her be the one approached about legal threats, go.to Larry and learn that he can communicate, and leave the mothers and others out of it. Heck have David spend money on a PI to see what Doris did. Maybe have it something that Larry sets up for him while he is away but sworn to secrecy until Doris confronts her brother. Honestly keeping the MIL and mother in the story, beyond some of the early parts to explain how this ultra feminist crap all got started, sucked some of the vitality out of the story and prevented Doris from personal growth.

I am fine.with his.being with Annette. Fine with her messaging that he still rejects and in fact (somewhat) wins her over as she falls.in love with him. Have Doris though have a short fling, dump Mark, feel remorse, come to.see the damage her brother is suffering at the hands of Ann, get theroay, reject her mother and MIL's corrupted views on marriage and fidelity. If she really loved David and is pining for him out of guilt (guilt means subconscious knows you did something wrong!), and knowing that she doesn't love Mark one iota, then have her break away and self reflect and change. Then the other events with NY state, give her a chance to find her husband and then interact with Annette. This could make a reconciliation possible, even if Annette is part of the package deal, without David tossing away all his romantic ideals (which are commendable).

But sadly little remorse from Doris on page. More acceptance that she will allow him a mistress and never herself cheat again, if she gets back with David, who she is obsessed with. So instead events have conspired along with Doris cutting a deal with Annette to trap him in the gilded cage again, without much choice on his part. Sadly a missed opportunity and unworthy sequel to Jailbreaking.

Not remotely as good as Jailbreaking. Also.not consistent in the characters. Disappointed.

Too many characters, not enough story.

not perfect ,but neither is life ..... just remember it IS fiction !!!

Loved Jailbreak, not so much this one.

Author says he wants to keep people consistent, but he lost his nerve with respect to not being cuckolded.

He was cheated on, so he can do the same by those rules of hers.

Taking her back without, serious new terms for their relationship would not be him.

Final forzado, el giro que se da con David, a quien tanto su esposa tramposa y ambas familias, lo tratan como el culpable que los engañó y presionan para que "no sea infantil y regrese con su esposa". Hay material para un final alternativo feliz pero justo.

Hmmmm ! Incredibly confusing. Frequently I didn’t know who was doing what to whom, or why. Way too convoluted. So many characters and those unpronounceable German names, please. It was as if the more complicated you made it the better you liked it. The whole story seemed to morph into a blender of people only concerned with money and sex. I could not identify or like even 1-character. I just read it and would have a hard time describing the ending. Only a disappointed, generous-2. No smiles !

Well that was disappointing. A well written wordy story. That fizzled in the end.

Seriously,every woman in this story was a slut? A very sad view of women from your view, and a poor opinion of men as well

It so needs a followup where he gets his balls back.

I quite liked Jail Breaking, for once the guy got the upper hand against your screwed up uber-feminist female characters, but you turned that on it's head with this crap. A quarter of the way down the first page it was it was obvious where this was going, and you didn't disappoint. TBH I'm beginning to think your writing these stories from your own experiences with women, in which case I feel sorry for you and you have my sympathy.

Rien à voir avec l'histoire du début. Très déçu par cette débilité.

You were right again.Some would not like the outcome of the completion.You destroyed the story by changing his conviction and principals about his marriage,his wife and family with this ending.You did exactly what I was afraid of. You Changed the man..1 star because of that...JZK

Damn, this actually makes Jail Breaking worse, which is an impressive feat. Having characters this unlikable steer the story is quite a tightrope act, and when it falls, it's a big splat. Shame, writing skills are undeniable, and it's clearly going against a lot of the tired old cliches in LW, but at the same time, a lot of these stories just leave me cold.

Same old glorification of degenerate horseshit.

Sort of a Robin Hood story but kept his ill gotten gains for himself, and why not? They took from him for 20 years.

Based on the introductory paragraph, I don’t really understand the consternation the author had with Jail Breaking’s characterizations. Yeah, the main character pretty much lied to everyone about his personality, but then again, no one was very up front with him either.

If you’re a kid, raised in a household full of lies, you’re not exactly gonna be an upfront honest person. There is a lot of wheedling and manipulation in this story. Sometimes no means no.

Thank you!

Posters: Many seem to confuse the story path with the quality of the story. Like the ending or not, was it it not well written? Entertaining? An ending that’s not trope is not a bad thing, and the character of the man and the ending seem consistent.

I don't know how to score this story. The first part I found interesting and with all the phone recordings and text messages, I was thinking this was going the way of another of the authors stories " Independence " but the real estate aspect changed that.

But the second part aside from the business part of the story was very lame.

Taking the bitch back and no punishment for the wife fucker lost me.

Second read and I agree with my first option. This was a terrible sequel. I like all the non family stuff but his family are all disgusting and should have remained cast off. Doris had no remorse and Mark didn’t meet a crow bar in the dark. Very unsatisfying

Read Jail Breaking for a second time and loved it, bumped it to 5 stars as I can disregard the poor grammar (who am I to criticize?) but this sequel ruins the greatness of that story. He goes from a man of principles to a willing cuckold who shrugs off his morals to become just like his wife - a thorough disappointment. This is easily the worst sequel to any story I've read on here.

A REAL DISAPPOINTMENT. YOU USUALLY D0 BETTER.

I'm sorry, but I enjoyed this story (both chapters) and I'm going to tell you I would like more! I know all the characters are amoral and worse! The story just gripped me and I shout MORE MORE MORE! 5*

Dobbin55

End of page 1, “ She was overwhelmed with guilt and worry,” yet it didn’t stop her cheating with that predatory, wife stealing, asshole Mark, did it.

Little head defeats big head big time?

So you wrote that Davy gave in, ignoring his vows just like the rest of his family. I'm disappointed. Just because his real estate dealings were shady doesn't mean he couldn't keep his marriage morals. I also wonder why Doris felt she deserved to have a lover on the side. Were her and Dave's mothers that strong an influence? Also, for a short fling, one that Dave left her over, it sure lasted a really long time.

I stopped reading when I came to this on the first page.

"Because you cannot live without her, nor without those other women from whom you also run. You can't even face them, so you hide. You are afraid that you will go back to them because you have no life without them."

Ummm...seems to me he's actually living quite well. Has a great life. Traveling throughout Europe. Fucking an easy German whore for 6 weeks. Plenty of money. Living in a cabin in a beautiful part of the country.

Seems like he's doing just fine without his whore of a wife and the other whores from his family. From the first story it was made perfectly clear he didn't really love his wife. Was pushed into the marriage. Manipulated. By her. By his parents. By her parents.

And every woman in his life is a complete whore. His sister. His mother. His mother in law. His sister in law. His daughters. And every male family member is a willing cuckold pussy whipped wimp.

So let's go back to the first story...his wife...who had little respect for him in the first installment...fucks her young stud after he warned her repeatedly...and he left her because he never really loved her.

Now...we have this tuetanic bitch who has known him all of a month...and who fucks anyone she fancies. Has the morals of a goat....looks the other way as her husband fucks any number of mistresses. This idiot is giving him advice about love? And he doesn't laugh in her face and say something like "oh that's rich...advice about love...my love life and what I should do with my whore wife from someone who has known me a month...who is cheating on her husband she claims she loves by fucking me daily...that IS laughable. By all means tell me who I love. And that I need all those duplicitous, lying, cheating whores in my family back in my life. Hilarious that I'd take advice about my personal life from you."

Whole thing is nonsense.

Been a few years since I read this. Two plots; one strong and decently done, the other weak and a bit chaotic.

Was a decent tale when it came to the business aspects and the characters associated with it (strong). The personal / people and their characteristics left a lot to be desired in my opinion (weak and chaotic).

I know you like writing challenges, and that you like to try and write characters that span the gamut of types and personalities, but as a reader, I prefer to at least admire if not like the protagonist. It turns out that in this, the protagonist isn’t admirable at all. I was also disappointed with the lack of insight into the relationships. You are usually so much better than that. Still a good read, but for me, unsatisfying. Still a 4 though, because it is well written.

Well done for a mature, well-presented offering. You are a fine author, and I hope more of your offerings will come.

Knife 21.

Authors comments at the beginning of this puzzle me. He is dishonest....that is true, but the women the author felt more for. I mean they are by far just as dishonest just not criminals. If they would of sold this as lets open up our marriage blah blah. Maybe all this could of been avoided. Could you imagine your mother plotting to frame you for an affair so your wife could fuck some guy. Regardless that we know the details but they thought he was the most honest straight laced person ever. They did not know about his business dealing so how does that make them so noble, actually its probably worse corruption is one thing but plotting against your kids and blackmail. Seems off. I liked the story I get it. People of means play by different rules in marriage it has always been that way.

The background on the others helped and it was a great story line. I actually did not know there was a sequel and read the original years ago. I actually have more questions now than answers. Doris is desperate for the MCs love. I think if he showed more over the last 20 years she would not want him so bad. I digressed what does be good mean from Doris mean? What did she gain from this ohh yeah thats right she can play as long as he can if she would of approached it that way in the beginning again less problems, but no story I suppose. The daughters I get they are young and stupid when they are in a loveless somewhat fuckfest of a marriage they will get it. I might of missed it so I read the original again it was portrayed as the mothers just leveraged the kids to fuck around on their husbands so that tracks some that they cheated as well. Men of means do not stop cheating by the way so I am not sure why that was clarified. Again the sequel was great left a few holes in the original if this was originally a open marriage or a realities of love story I would get it but it was written in a way of being a forced cuckold story. Which is why loving wives is usually a mess no man is going to let his wife fuck around if he cant if they can even get to that point. Because as sure as the day is long women are just as insecure as men especially when it comes to other women. The male ego troupe is just blahhh shit the people that say it do not even believe it anymore. Wow long post sorry about that i really liked this one. Great job.

I reread both stories together and I got the main point.

David is a guy who is happy with the truth.

In the first story he found out the truth about what his wife and family thought about him.

He did not like it so he left to escape their nonsense.

He found a woman who really loved him who was also a honest romantic.

In the sequel he realized that in truth he was a man who could not abandon his family in time of trouble.

In the end he realized that it was not important what others thought about him only what he wanted out of life.

So Doris keeps the illusion that she has her husband until she dies.

Annette get to share her life with David.

David gets two women who love him and another child in his life.

Celebrating faux European "sophistication" earns a 1.

@davezq no that's David's mother Agnes. Not sure I would call her the mistress though. Annette is David's mistress now and she's pregnant with his kid. Doris said she'd be good (whatever that means).

Now that I'm older I finally understand how great these 2 stories are after re reading them for the 5th time lol.

It kept me hopping. So Doris is now the mistress of Annette's father? Maybe I missed some things...

I enjoyed the sequel but nowhere near as much as the original story. as well-written and constructed as the story is, it was ultimately a very depressing story of how banal and venal human beings can be.

reconcile with daves wife jesus christ these hey main charcters a pussy btw stories need warning labels

I know. This story was a trainwreck compared to the original. It might have had more weight if Doris had woken up and realized what she had done. Instead she pines while fucking away with her stud. Wtf? It would have been more interesting if she had a revelation about herself and their marriage. Nit just finding out about his criminal activities that make him more dangerous. Finding out he has a mistress and got her pregnant. Making her feel like she is being replaced. Instead none ofnthe character grow. It is clear with all his spouted witticisms that thr MC has not changed and is just gaslighting his mother. So yeah Doris who was conflicted in thr first story but broke their marriage and opened the door, has no real development in this story. She talks about what happened to Mark and how she wants no one else and it kind of comes across as believable but it is like a 10 months late. Bleccch.

The author writes very well. All of his characters are ugly and horrific examples of what human beings aspire to be. Destable. Contemptible in nearly every way.

The thought of all of them procreating...spreading their genes...corrupting the pool in even a fictional world is a scary prospect.

Buy as I said the writing itself is impeccable.

But if you are reading this before starting the story and want to have a general understanding? Imagine a gleaming white, pristine toilet. That is the technical writing of this author. Then imagine a 400 lb slob of a man comes in with a sour stomach and deficates rather aggressively in and on that pristine toilet? It has become an absolute shit show of the worst kind. The 400 lb man and his loose, overflowing bowels represents every single character in this story and it's prequel.

Sure the toilet's clean, but what it's full of is repulsive.

Most excellent constructed tale.

I could almost feel the ending, coming. Shame, the author went bankrupt on the cusp.

Wow, I found that very heartbreaking.

Not a single character in the story stands out. It was really depressing.

Everyone lies, cheats, steals...

Funny vision of the author or all the characters act only for selfish and personal desires.

I read the story only once and I'm sure I will read it again. I can't say I liked the MC but the author did promise he will remain the same and i think he delivered. The MC was an immoral in business and moral in his private life. He needed to grow up and meld his two parts. This story is about that.

What I like most about the author is that there's no black and white. It's much more realistic this way.

No, I don't like the MC. No, I don't like the rest of the family. But I like the realistic story as a whole and I will need to read it again to get more from it.

5 stars for a well written story and thank you for making me think.

Too many moving parts, not enough heart.

Read this over a year ago, good then and better now. A nice ending to Jail Break? The machinations of smart corrupt people are, I am afraid, a fact of life. Just look around you. Corrupt politicians and government officials. Elections tampered with, inflation out of control and very suspicious virus running rampant and released accidentally or purposely? Even today in my county there are questions about our voting ballots. Declining wages of the middle class. Do any of you realize that the 200 wealthiest people in this country hold more wealth than the bottom 150 million citizens? That is half the population. Something wrong people.

What a convoluted story! The author stated that his characters did not change their spots. But cheating mother and mother-in-law were exonerated in this sequil, a contradiction. What of the disrespecting daughters? Forgive and forget? I don't see that in his character. But perhaps wife and mistress was the best revenge. A most unsatisfactory 5 star story!

Wow. He didn't escape AT ALL. Sad ending.

I would have cut off Doris and mother would suffer dearly for scamming so much against me

Not a satisfying ending for me. Too many loose ends.

The secret to taking an interesting premise, great characters and an ever evolving plotline and making it into a CUCKFEST. I don't know where this author lost his balls but fuck if he's not the biggest cream pie aficionados on this site.

Wo,en who want to openly cheat and the wimpy men married to them.

I hate this even more than the original.

Your stories are frustrating, because you bring in too many characters from left field who have only a marginal impact. Yet, you seem to want to flush out those characters ad nauseam. It only clouds the main story. You do have a good plot, and you have adequately flushed out the main characters, but in my humble opinion you are wasting too much time trying to flush out those characters.. Consequently, it denigrates your story, and makes me dislike what could be an excellent story. I have read other stories you have submitted, where you have done the same thing. This is the first one I stopped reading, because my head was ready to explode.

The sequel I am not sorry to say is rubbish/trash he is just been lowered to their level and the tradition continues. What should have happened is, he gets/has his own property and moves out to it with all his stuff. He divorces his pathetic shew wife. He then then informs all his relatives, especially his daughters husbands that they are cheating sluts and he brings down the whole coven of bitches publicly. He also goes after his ex-wife's lover and humiliates him. He finds a respected lady that he marries and they live out their life as best as they can as every marriage has its problems. His family disown him especially his mother, wife, daughters and that is fine with him.

Disjointed, but an interesting read. All is not what it seems

Just another apologist story for cheating women and their shitty behavior. White knight syndrome is a term used to describe someone who feels compelled to “rescue” people in intimate relationships, often at the expense of their own needs. Such behaviors stem from a mindset that perceives the other sex as weak, dependent, absolved of all responsibility for their outcomes, and thinks that she will dedicate herself to loving him because of his help. White Knights are still Narcissists, despite their desire to be seen as helpful, generous, and kind.

Relationship codependency is often referred to as the “White Knight” syndrome, because codependent people tend to be rescuers. The codependent mantra is, “Love Conquers All.” Denying and rationalizing away the obvious, relationship codependents believe that if they love their partner enough, the person will change. They go from relationship to relationship thinking, “If he or she would only change, this would be the perfect relationship, the one I’ve always dreamed of.” But it never is because the problem lies not in the relationship but within themselves. Over time, codependents become emotionally dependent on their significant other and obsessed with the person’s needs and problems. This is a mental health issue, an emotional addiction. Until codependents become aware of their problem and acknowledge the part they play in the all their painful, failed relationships, they will repeat the destructive behavior over and over.

"I have great sympathy for the women in my story and less for my protagonist who in a very dishonest person."

That alone told me this story is going to be shit.

At least in the first part the MC left.

You have sympathy for the women but not the man. His crookedness didn't involve involve playing with people, just the law and the gov.

Yet, their scheming and backstabbing and demeaning talk about him, endears the women to you.

That speaks volumes about you and your value system.

As usual, you are a skilled writer, but a shit story teller.

I don't know what's up with you and some other authors. It's like you think pushing the envelope requires being morally bankrupt.

There are many a scenario where the envelope could be pushed with the characters keeping their basic human decency and integrity. You always fail in this regard.

You build the characters very skillfully. The Mother. MIL, wife, SIL and the kids all were disgusting sluts. The M/C was a skilled crook who finally stacked the deck somewhat in his favor. No character was likeable; however the story flow was very good and a great read,

Ending was so rushed and nothing has changed no explanations given of what happened with Larry, his wife and Annette also confusing at the end while his family is Still sluting around and what happened with his daughter's so many plot holes

David? Who the heck is he?

semi confusing sequel. Is it true that David is once again committed to a loveless marriage of convivence that condones cheating by both spouses but primarily by the wife? Are we to assume Annette is now mysteriously pregnant with David's child and Larry Jr. manned up and divorce his slut wife Anne?

A weak ending to what had begun promisingly in the first part.

Frankly unbelievable that the main character would so willingly abandon the only firm beliefs that he appeared to have, especially when, by his own admission, his marriage had been a cage for him.

The character revealed in this part of the story would never have walked away in the first place. A waste.

What a great site this is! Apparently rational humans publicly cursing fictional characters!

I really hate most of this guys stories he's obviously a cuckold fetishest but more than that I think he's really into the whole other men fucking their wives and going for the sloppy seconds bullshit. Like seriously dude just man up and admit your an Ass Bandit!

I take it back. Having you finish it was worse than the horrible lack of an ending.

Second time around reading it, and altough I loved where Dave ended up, I just can't understand what goes on with the women in this story, so the wife is so distraugh that her husband is gone that in 8 months she has keep doing that wich drove him away?? How does his mother knowing in the flesh the pain of finding out your spouse is cheating not only condone, butexpect 'her little boy' to suck it up and just role with the new reality? I mean does they all share insanity toguether or this guys is so unlucky to only run into psycos?

This really took a nose dive huh

Power corrupts, absolute power corrupts absolutely.

5*

I loath most of the women in this series and wish all the pain, loss and disappointment in the world on them. The 2 mothers I might give a pass a their husbands cheat on them but his wife, daughters and the brother-in-laws wife deserve naught but pain.

The first story was quite reasonable. However this second part, which seems to go the normal route of a lot of stories, changes the main characters mind set to one one that is almost a polar opposite and is now doing what the females of his family are doing. As he was so strong on his feeling in the first story, there is, I feel nothing to say why he changed so drastically in this storey. Thus I feel this story is a very poor bolt on to the first one and thus whilst I would read the first one again, I would not read this one. The main character has turned into a hypocrite. Vey poor for me.

Fuck me! What bunch of weird commenters! This is a story, a fantasy put into words. Apart from that, we the readers, range in experience of life some are very pedantic in their lives, some slip and slide through it. sometimes it's all champagne and sometimes complete shit. A great story about a bloke doing the best he can under trying circumstances.