by Halfman11
This has to be one of the very best "first time writing" stories. It was well organized, very descriptive, and enough, without over doing it to make me and other readers want to see more chapters submitted - the sooner the better!
I plan on continuing this story at a fairly fast pace, hopefully writing another chapter or two per week. Please continue to leave me suggestions, as I am new to this. Thanks for reading!
Very good story. A lot of real feelings and desires expressed. Mom has made a good impression on you and knows more than you think. You greatest desire can be achieved in the right circumstance.
A very good storyline that is hot and erotic.
I'll be watching for the next chapter.
Thanks for the read.
A great start that has many possibilities. Tanya and Kyle's mother seem like good lovers. Let's keep this going.
When is version two coming - the rest of their day could get real interesting...
Great story - very hot......when is #2 coming.....Sue
But if this is a true story; why did it end here? There's the rest of the day; the party, the following weeks with both ladies??? Rather quickly paced. Mom and friend run around nude; hmmmm, rather convenient
I noticed a few grammatical errors"sting" for instance was most definitely not the correct word here " I know I surely enjoyed sting your big load.""
Please continue cause I'm ready for more;
DKP